Some people blame the government for the increase in childhood obesity while others think it is the parents’ fault. Discuss both sides and give your opinion
Obesity has been a major concern for the health department around the globe. Many individuals believe that national administration should take responsibility for the increase in overweight problems in kids. Whereas, others believe that caretaker is the reasons for this problem. In this essay, both the notions will be discussed followed by personal opinion.
Government has the authority to prevent sales of such products which can affect the health of an individual. The license to manufacture and sale of such products is under the government authority and they could test them and verify with the specifications of overweight complications before allowing marketing of such products. The role of such authorities is vital and much needed to eliminate obesity hazards. For instance, recently in Delhi, India the government cancelled the license of all the street vendors to minimize the number of cases of fatness in hospitals.
On the other hand, parents should also take care of their children and not allow to intake such food on a daily basis. Mothers can play a pivotal role in it by preventing kids to go out and cook for them healthier food at home. In addition to that pocket money of the children should be monitored to know the expenditure of money in such unhealthy products. For instance, controlling the diet of a kid and follow up with their daily activity can limit their access to unhygienic products.
In conclusion, both government and guardian can contribute to minimizing these obesity hazards from society by working at their own levels. Therefore, I believe support of both is equally important and should take responsibility to control overweight issues.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 342, Rule ID: PERSONAL_OPINION_FRIENDSHIP[1]
Message: Use simply 'opinion'.
Suggestion: opinion
...e notions will be discussed followed by personal opinion. Government has the authority to preve...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, therefore, whereas, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 24.0651302605 62% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1414.0 1615.20841683 88% => OK
No of words: 272.0 315.596192385 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.19852941176 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.06108636974 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90171132837 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 153.0 176.041082164 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.5625 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 442.8 506.74238477 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 5.43587174349 18% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.1634558267 49.4020404114 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.0 106.682146367 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4285714286 20.7667163134 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 7.06120827912 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.151264680826 0.244688304435 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.053961538039 0.084324248473 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0318163438242 0.0667982634062 48% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0930716888033 0.151304729494 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0451702233818 0.056905535591 79% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 13.0946893788 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.88 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.4 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 78.4519038076 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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