Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
While it is argued that more sports centers are necessary to improve public health, some believe that there are many more effective ways for the matter. Although there are more places to exercise for the public, I don't think that it will mitigate the public health issue as much as other measures that will be described in this essay.
To begin with, it is proven in various scientific researches that regular exercise has a significant impact on our health condition in a good way. For example, cardiovascular exercise has many benefits like increased lung capacity, reducing the risks of any adult diseases, and so on. Apart from that, any sports, such as tennis, soccer, or basketball are often catchy and fun, alleviating stresses and improving mental health. However, such sports places often lack to meet the demand of residents living around. Therefore, it seems to be clear that increasing the number of sports facilities would be directly beneficial for public health.
However, I agree with the idea that there are more effective measures we can try to improve public health. First, any junk foods containing a large amount of sugar and fat should be prohibited, or at least advised to avoid. We all know that such foods often cause obesity, high blood pressure or even worse diabete, and those diseases are the main factors to make public health worse. second, it seems to be important to raise public awareness about the importance of health. For instance, if we are aware of how dangerous diabetes is, we ourselves would avoid eating high sugar contained foods. Finally, the government could allocate more funds to develop medical infrastructures and systems. Another meaning is that sick people will likely heal faster, contributing to increasing public health rates.
In conclusion, I believe that it is true that enough sports facilities would definitely benefit public health, but not as effective as other measures mentioned above in various ranges.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, however, if, second, so, therefore, while, apart from, at least, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in fact, such as, it is true, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1655.0 1615.20841683 102% => OK
No of words: 322.0 315.596192385 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.1397515528 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23607819155 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58496489664 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 176.041082164 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.590062111801 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 520.2 506.74238477 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 0.809619238477 618% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 29.9443929086 49.4020404114 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.333333333 106.682146367 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4666666667 20.7667163134 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.4 7.06120827912 161% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.310839311701 0.244688304435 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.1050763594 0.084324248473 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0856796870909 0.0667982634062 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.212590517515 0.151304729494 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0482775271994 0.056905535591 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 13.0946893788 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.7 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 78.4519038076 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.