Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.
Some people propose that the ultimate method of making the general public healthier is to build more places where they play sports, while others believe this initiative is futile and other policies are warranted. In this answer, I will discuss the rationales behind these two views before showing why I favor the latter.
On the one hand, increasing the availability of sport amenities could somewhat help improve public health. A crucial part of staying healthy is staying physically active, and making it easier for people to play sports is a good measure to this end. Furthermore, the greater presence of basketball courts, calisthenics parks, or other such amenities and, more importantly, the sight of people using them could inspire sedentary onlookers to exercise more.
However, I side with those who say that the aforementioned approach would bring about little results if any. This is because increasing the number of sports facilities does not automatically translate to greater participation. In most cities today, despite the ubiquity of places where people can play sports for free, the majority of the population remain sorely inactive and health problems related to lack of exercise are on the rise.
To meaningfully improve the health of the public, it must be acknowledged that fitness is only part of the equation. A whole host of factors, including affordable access to healthcare, advancement of medical treatment, enforcement of food safety, and so on, all influence how healthy the population is and must be acted on. The recent outbreak of the novel coronavirus is a powerful testament to this and how immaterial fitness is in the grand scheme of things. In conclusion, having more places where people can participate in sporting activities is always welcome, but it is not by any stretch the optimal way to improve public health. Instead, a combination of steps is needed to holistically enhance people's health and prevent diseases.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 60, Rule ID: GENERAL_XX[1]
Message: Use simply 'public'.
Suggestion: public
... that the ultimate method of making the general public healthier is to build more places where...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, however, if, look, so, then, while, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1646.0 1615.20841683 102% => OK
No of words: 315.0 315.596192385 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.2253968254 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21286593061 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84944288712 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 176.041082164 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.609523809524 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 521.1 506.74238477 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 7.0 2.52805611222 277% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.4768523055 49.4020404114 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.615384615 106.682146367 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.2307692308 20.7667163134 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.15384615385 7.06120827912 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.343196108912 0.244688304435 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103723760372 0.084324248473 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0602991821088 0.0667982634062 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.178659811117 0.151304729494 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00871561133342 0.056905535591 15% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 13.0946893788 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 50.2224549098 77% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.35 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.34 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 78.4519038076 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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