Some people say that it is the responsibility of individuals to save money for their own care after they retire. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Retirement has recently aroused a controversial topic whether it is the responsibility of the individuals to make savings for their own goods after this period. For my part, I strongly agree with the statement and will provide some reasons which are related to a comfortable life without the worrisome of tax and a closer relationship between family members.
First of all, saving up enables individuals to maintain their financial balance so as to ensure a more stable life after registration. The retired can be financially independent to meet their necessary requirements without relying on the welfare assistance from families, or even further the government. A good illustration for this is that ederly people are capable of paying their living expenses including housing or healthcare on their own. Furthermore, the elders can spend the leftover funds on a vacation which enables them to pass their old age peacefully.
What is more, discretionary income from the elders, in particular, may become a great source of administrative support for their future descendants. It appears that the income is used to aid their daily life especially when they face economic troubles, thereby forming deep connections between the retirees and their relatives. According to a recent report, a number of ederly people are capable of fully paying for their grandchildren some kinds of fees such as tuition fees. This activity not only lessens the financial burdens on the children's parents but also shows the devotion and love of a grandfather for his progeny.
To summarize, I strongly agree that retired people should deduct some of their salaries for savings before their working-years end. In a few words, economizing money will help them strictly control their own assets and even make good impressions with relatives.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 81, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...als to maintain their financial balance so as to ensure a more stable life after registr...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, may, so, as to, in particular, such as, first of all, what is more
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1531.0 1615.20841683 95% => OK
No of words: 289.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.29757785467 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12310562562 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96982989557 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.615916955017 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 479.7 506.74238477 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 21.5019378972 49.4020404114 44% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 127.583333333 106.682146367 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0833333333 20.7667163134 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.41666666667 7.06120827912 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.325949363363 0.244688304435 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.115730287151 0.084324248473 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0785565277184 0.0667982634062 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.203646098335 0.151304729494 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0409800789918 0.056905535591 72% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 13.0946893788 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 50.2224549098 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.76 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.42 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 78.4519038076 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 9.78957915832 158% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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