Almost every city has their own zoo. But some people argue that zoos are merciless and governments should close them. Others, however, believe that zoos can protect endangered animals. In this essay, both views will be discussed.
There are many rare animals that could get proper care in the zoo, such as golden monkeys, red-crowned cranes and pandas. Because most zookeepers receive professional training before they work in the zoo, they know the life styles and diets of the animals they look after. Besides, If animals have diseases, zoos have veterinarians to treat them. As a result, rare animals can be protected by the zoo. Furthermore, some endangered animals live in forests or other places outside of the zoo, so it could accelerate their extinction rates because of the many dangers. For example, environmental degradation could contribute to the destruction of natural habitats, such as deforestation, acid rain and aridity. Moreover, hunters also pose a threat to rare animals.
In contrast, some animals really died in the zoo because of inappropriate living environments. According to a report, there was a polar bear named ‘Winner’ that died in the zoo in Buenos Aires in 2012 because of the high temperature. Consequently, some animals should live in a special environment, such as polar bears and penguins. Even though some bad things happen in the zoo, we cannot ignore the professional zookeepers and veterinarians that provide a good life for animals.
In my opinion, zoos should not be closed by the local governments because they can protect endangered animals. However, I think that zookeepers should give them more realistic living environments, similar to the environments of their natural habitats.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, consequently, furthermore, however, if, look, moreover, really, so, for example, i think, in contrast, such as, as a result, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 41.998997996 71% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1422.0 1615.20841683 88% => OK
No of words: 276.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.15217391304 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07593519647 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77250392025 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 151.0 176.041082164 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.547101449275 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 458.1 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 5.43587174349 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 1.0 16.0721442886 6% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 276.0 20.2975951904 1360% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 0.0 49.4020404114 0% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 1422.0 106.682146367 1333% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 276.0 20.7667163134 1329% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 158.0 7.06120827912 2238% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.67935871743 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.431196994958 0.244688304435 176% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.431196994958 0.084324248473 511% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0667982634062 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.289801507988 0.151304729494 192% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.113538527787 0.056905535591 200% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 140.8 13.0946893788 1075% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -217.12 50.2224549098 -432% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 7.44779559118 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 112.1 11.3001002004 992% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 14.07 12.4159519038 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 20.99 8.58950901804 244% => Dale chall readability score is high.
difficult_words: 64.0 78.4519038076 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 54.0 9.78957915832 552% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 112.4 10.1190380762 1111% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 141.0 10.7795591182 1308% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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