Some young people have free time in the evenings after school or on days off from school. Which of the
following activities would be most beneficial for young people (ages 14-18) to do in their spare time?
Why?
- Gaining practical work experience either at a part time job or by volunteering in the community
-Learning to play a sport
- Learning to play a musical instrument
In my point of view, definitely, young students should balance their free time. By this I mean that these three ideas might be helpful for them. Although, I think that gaining work experience can be even more useful for their future than others.
As I told before, I believe that young people should spend their free times learning to play a sport and a musical instrument. Even if I believe that these ideas are not useless at all, indeed, gaining some work experience can be significantly important for their career in future. So, being a volunteer in some institution will, in fact, help them how to being responsible with their time or behavior. Then, for instance, they will learn correct behavior in business environment and how to handle office’s issues.
Otherwise, I would argue that it’s important, especially, for teenagers to learn how to play some sports or some instruments. So, there is a tendency to believe that career is most important part of their lives, but I think that they should be encouraged to develop their artistic skills as well. Learning how to play piano ou tennis, for example, is, definitely, not a waste of time. Then, this might benefit for their personal lives, personality and, surely, for their relationships also.
Despite what I think about teenagers spending their free times learning how to play some instrument or sports, I truly would say that having experience as a volunteer would help them incredible more in their future lives.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 272, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...ignificantly important for their career in future. So, being a volunteer in some institut...
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Line 3, column 441, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to correct'
Suggestion: to correct
...r. Then, for instance, they will learn correct behavior in business environment and ho...
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Line 5, column 491, Rule ID: ALSO_SENT_END[1]
Message: 'Also' is not used at the end of the sentence. Use 'as well' instead.
Suggestion: as well
...ty and, surely, for their relationships also. Despite what I think about teenager...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, then, well, for example, for instance, i mean, i think, in fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 24.0651302605 162% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 24.0 41.998997996 57% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1249.0 1615.20841683 77% => OK
No of words: 249.0 315.596192385 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01606425703 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.97237131171 4.20363070211 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6793861264 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 136.0 176.041082164 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.546184738956 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 375.3 506.74238477 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.2862635214 49.4020404114 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.083333333 106.682146367 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.75 20.7667163134 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.83333333333 7.06120827912 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.273738785067 0.244688304435 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.111341946106 0.084324248473 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.053891168342 0.0667982634062 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.187415458025 0.151304729494 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0427945195891 0.056905535591 75% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 13.0946893788 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 50.2224549098 119% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 12.4159519038 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.05 8.58950901804 94% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 78.4519038076 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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