Stress related illnesses are becoming increasingly common What do you think are the causes of this What solutions can you suggest

For the past few decades, due to neck and neck competition in every field to increase economies, dwellers have been facing such kind of issues that directly impact on their health and mind which later leads to the occurrence of strain related harmones in their body, and it introduce many a disease such as cardiovascular diseases, obesity, immature deaths, obesity, lack of sleep and much more. This essay shall first demonstrates that the reason of inclined stress is work load, and the possible cure for this burning issue is participation in a physical work out.
To commence, while considering the imperative reasons behind the continuously esclating stress harmone, cardisol, in the detizens, first and foremost is that the over-working at the workplaces. To explicate, in order to earn more revenue to fulfill fundamental needs of the family members, rarely do few masses who not like to work extremely, and this is the prime factor that has cast a profound impact on their holistic growth as well as it leads to multifarious health issues that are a harculean task to cure. Simultaneously, this hectic schedule make the workers in the boredom situation that effected their healthy lifestyle as they become devoid of proper diet and sleep; therefore, such individuals become a victim of dangerous diseases and face medical issues. To cite an example, a research conducted by the university of Mississauga, in Ontario, in 2020, on the group 100 employees of Steel Manufacturing Company, which were from milleneal generation, revealed that 75% workers were survived from obesity and ageing effect due to excessive burden of the workload and to earn more money to satisfy their demands.
A viable solution to sort out this grave repercussions of stress related issues mentioned in the aforesaid notion is that to become more active as compare to their current living style. To elaborate, if a person is gradually altering the way of their living, it would be beneficial for not only to stay healthy, but also to relax their mind from all the stressful thoughts, and simply divert their mind from tensions. It is rightly said that prevention is better than cure and applying the same thing in life, it makes everything changed in a short while, so it had better be to participate in the physical workout games like badminton, swimming, skipping, running. Besides, all these alterations in the lifestyle directly associated with less usage of medical sources and cures that are extremely expensive and painful too. Had my friend, Smith, never begun to run at least one hour on daily bases, he could not be abled to loss 10 lbs pound weight.
In compendium, having pondered-over a great deal of thoughts and deliberation, it could be encapsulated that the prime factor of increasing depression amongst the masses is the pressure of work for more revenues, however, it could be ameliorated by adopting a healthy lifestyle while indulging in the physical workout.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, however, if, so, therefore, well, while, at least, kind of, such as, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 10.4138276553 163% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 7.30460921844 192% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 24.0651302605 154% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 76.0 41.998997996 181% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2480.0 1615.20841683 154% => OK
No of words: 488.0 315.596192385 155% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.08196721311 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70007681154 4.20363070211 112% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82549199232 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 281.0 176.041082164 160% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.575819672131 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 774.9 506.74238477 153% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 0.809619238477 618% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 10.0 4.76152304609 210% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 40.0 20.2975951904 197% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 81.3054511634 49.4020404114 165% => OK
Chars per sentence: 206.666666667 106.682146367 194% => OK
Words per sentence: 40.6666666667 20.7667163134 196% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.83333333333 7.06120827912 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0863771300029 0.244688304435 35% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0339614732708 0.084324248473 40% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0389444560163 0.0667982634062 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.050252371852 0.151304729494 33% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.018514518995 0.056905535591 33% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 22.8 13.0946893788 174% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 30.88 50.2224549098 61% => OK
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 18.9 11.3001002004 167% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.07 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.25 8.58950901804 119% => OK
difficult_words: 143.0 78.4519038076 182% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 20.0 9.78957915832 204% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 18.0 10.1190380762 178% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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