53It is more important for governments to spend money to improve Internet access than to improve public transportation.
In modern days, it appears to some that due to the rapid evolution of technology and diversification of internet service and communication equipment, interconnection among different people from two sides of the world has been a convenient thing that is taken for granted. Others maintain a contrary view of providing Internet access to all citizens. While these ideas have their bases, they need to be scrutinized meticulously. In my opinion, Internet providing is necessary.
First of all, from a standpoint of economy, internet infrastructure is a rewarding necessity for connecting the most fringe and deprived regions with prosperous and developed cities. People obtain the opportunity to widen their horizons, the populace may have more opportunities to browse information and find or even create jobs from a long distance. For example, people who come from Guizhou Province can consult online about applying for a graphic engineer job in Shanghai without arriving at the scene in person.
Moreover, in consideration of education. It can be more effectively provided for people since online schools are much more available than those in real life, especially in regions that lack educational resources. And the convenience of information obtaining paves way for civilization and forms the populaces into civilized individuals. Those who benefited from it may have a sense of obligation to enhance their hometown. For example, my aunt by the name of Lily who hails from a rural province in China recognizes the plight and survival dilemma of the poor more than those who were raised in relatively prosperous cities. Thanks to the internet, she has the path to expose stories of poor people and resonates with many viewers online. Many readers are impressed by her journal and begin to find ways to construct the country. After they start their civil-service careers, when it comes to a tricky poverty alleviation project, they know how and where to step forward to assure necessities and prop up the livelihoods of the farmers, thus a virtuous cycle forms.
A voice rises that without public transportation, construction of internet access is just pie in the sky. However, there's a saying:" Give a man a fish, you feed him for one day. Teach a man to fish, and you feed him for a lifetime". Basic transportation is needed, but education and bridge of information have a way more profound influence on the future.
Therefore, reflecting upon all reasons mentioned above, the government devoting money to improve internet access exerts effective influences on societies in a myriad of facets. Not only does it encourage connectivity and boost the economy to vigorous, but also has profound benefits for the future. While there are one thousand Hamlets in one thousand people's eyes, I believe my opponents will compromise after reading my article.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 116, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: there's
...access is just pie in the sky. However, theres a saying:' Give a man a fish, you ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, thus, while, for example, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 69.0 52.1666666667 132% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 8.0752688172 272% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2412.0 1977.66487455 122% => OK
No of words: 459.0 407.700716846 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.25490196078 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62863751936 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04532771851 2.67179642975 114% => OK
Unique words: 271.0 212.727598566 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.590413943355 0.524837075471 112% => OK
syllable_count: 776.7 618.680645161 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.6694925997 48.9658058833 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.636363636 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8636363636 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.18181818182 5.45110844103 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.88709677419 246% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.214653337594 0.236089414692 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0524123473 0.076458572812 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0512035223603 0.0737576698707 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.10832712844 0.150856017488 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0264279677506 0.0645574589148 41% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 58.1214874552 74% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.17 10.9000537634 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.69 8.01818996416 121% => OK
difficult_words: 147.0 86.8835125448 169% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 10.002688172 125% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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