are government doing good in educating people to pay attention to the importance of eating healthy food
In the progressive and sophisticated world where we live, people face many choices related to their eating habits because the food industry extend rapidly. In this situation, governments play key roles on educating people to modify their eating habits and consume nutritious and healthy food. Some individuals believe that government has several useful plans that learn people more related to healthy eating, however others adhere to the idea that these efforts are noe adequate and people usually tend to eat junk food than heathy ones. I support the second perspective. In following conspicuous paragraoh, I will elabote on my view points.
To begin with, increating the number of advertizment related to companies that produce unhealthy material showes the inconvenient performance of governments. Governments receive high tax from companies to allow them for advertizing their products at public places to attract peoples’s attention. So, they extremly rely on this tax for managing country and never prevent companies to advertize their unhealthy products. Advertizing is the main factor for stimulating people for eating inappropriate foods and improve by government’s law. To shed light on this matter, I will bring up an example in which I was involved. In the second year of bachelor studies at university, we had an assignment to evaluate the number of billboard in city that allocated to adveting unhealthy food. Examination of varous billborad that installed on main street of our city reaveled that about 90 percent of them persuade people to consume their inconvenient products and never were collected by government because they paied too much for buying these billboards. This example aptli illuminates how important and beneficial it is to adopt law for preventing the advertizement of such companies.
Another notheworthy point to be mentioned is that, econimic predicaments force governmet to encourage establishing new companies or markets to employ people even they pruduce harmful materials. Nowadays, one of the prominent problembs of governments is managing unemployments which is increasing rapidly especially among educated people. These companies hire many people in various and help govermnet to control them better without considering their harmful affects on people’s health. The Asian society of managing international conpanies declares that the famous and prosperous ones in their regiones produce unhealthy materials and hire many people at their various branches but governmets never stop their actions because they imrove the economic situations of countries.
Taking all aforementioned reasons and example into account, it can be concluded that governments have not constructive effects on educating people to eat healthy food. Since they receive high tax from the companies which produce harmful materials, they never prevent them so people encourage to consume these products more. Forthermore, they can decrease the rate of unemployements through these companies so supports them. Governments not only educate people to use healthy food, but also prepare good sotuations for the companies to produce these naterials more.
- people benefit more from travelling in their own country than from travelling to foreign countries 68
- are government doing good in educating people to pay attention to the importance of eating healthy food 90
- in the past it was easier toidentify what type of career or job would lead to a secure or successful future. 3
- the best way to travel is in a group led by a tour guide 76
- for a successful developement of a country it is more important for the government to spend money on education of very young children than to spend money on universities 71
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
In the progressive and sophisticated wor...
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Line 2, column 371, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to people'
Suggestion: to people
...ent has several useful plans that learn people more related to healthy eating, however...
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Line 3, column 65, Rule ID: TO_NON_BASE[1]
Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'company'.
Suggestion: company
...g the number of advertizment related to companies that produce unhealthy material showes ...
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Line 5, column 292, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'consuming'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'encourage' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: consuming
... never prevent them so people encourage to consume these products more. Forthermore, they ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, second, so, in fact, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 67.0 52.1666666667 128% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2706.0 1977.66487455 137% => OK
No of words: 478.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.66108786611 4.8611393121 116% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67581127817 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00003793094 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 269.0 212.727598566 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.562761506276 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 838.8 618.680645161 136% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.51630824373 119% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.0708095781 48.9658058833 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.857142857 100.406767564 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.7619047619 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.7619047619 5.45110844103 51% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.269041837121 0.236089414692 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0861222123543 0.076458572812 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0972050618931 0.0737576698707 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.182214205988 0.150856017488 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0823961997477 0.0645574589148 128% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.6 11.7677419355 141% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 32.22 58.1214874552 55% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 10.1575268817 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.84 10.9000537634 145% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.45 8.01818996416 118% => OK
difficult_words: 143.0 86.8835125448 165% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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