Because people are busy doing so many different things, they do very few things well.
Nowadays, several tasks have influenced the quality of jobs. In this regard, there is a controversial question asking whether being busy leads to have bad results in doing tasks. I agree with the opinion which is expressing the lack of attention during a lot of works. The reasons to substantiate my idea are explored in the following.
First, carefulness is so important in reaching goals and a person who has a lot of things to do cannot concentrate on his purposes. To put on the other hand, an individual who wants to finish his responsibility very well, need to have strong attention and many duties destroy this ability. As an illustration, I am going to speak about my brother who used to take a lot of classes at the same time. He enrolled in summer classes such as painting and computer programming, while he was studying at his university. After a while, he faced bad scores in his lessons from the university and could not spend enough time on his summer classes. My brother lost his concentration also his attention for all of his classes and as a result, he could get a proper outcome neither in summer classes nor his academia.
Second, the feeling of tiredness has negative effects on the process of preparing for major things. To be specific, a man or a woman who decides to participate in a project requires to make him or herself ready for that purpose. Surely, when a guy takes apart in lots of activities, it has harmful impacts on the project and variation of plans, does not let the guy end his task accurately. A personal experience of mine can drive this fact home. When I was in college, I was in a newspaper group and I was playing on a soccer team. Once, our boss in the group told "you have to write a paper about the problems of soccer team", and I accepted, but I could not do my task because I was so tired; therefore, at the deadline I could not prepare the paper and I compelled the boss to change his plan. If I had never done a lot of jobs simultaneously, our group would not encounter difficulties.
In conclusion, I do believe being busy, has negative results on the quality of other jobs. Since it leads to loss the carefulness and attention which is a considerable factor during a task also it make a person tired and with a sense of tiredness, no one can be on his the best performance.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 183, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'making'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'require' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: making
...es to participate in a project requires to make him or herself ready for that purpose. ...
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Line 7, column 198, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'makes'?
Suggestion: makes
...nsiderable factor during a task also it make a person tired and with a sense of tire...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, so, therefore, well, while, in conclusion, such as, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1918.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 425.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.51294117647 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54043259262 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79925249538 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.524705882353 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 613.8 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.5335998292 48.9658058833 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.947368421 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3684210526 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.89473684211 5.45110844103 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.10461893582 0.236089414692 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0301906303009 0.076458572812 39% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0482260864448 0.0737576698707 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.059460083316 0.150856017488 39% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00918903899659 0.0645574589148 14% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 58.1214874552 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.17 10.9000537634 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.74 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 86.8835125448 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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