Business should do anything they can to make a profit.
Some people may insist that the main goal of the company is making money. However, it is unacceptable that company makes some misbehavior for managing business well, in other words, to get beneficial from business should be based on the truthfulness. So, I disagree the statement that enterprises should do everything they can to make a profit.
First of all, companies are not supposed to discriminate customers by their race or sex. They should treat every people same. Few years ago, I saw the news about two companies which make clothes. I was shocked because they were using racism on their marketing. To be specific, they put clothes which were printed word 'black' to off-American child model, and another company's Western models were mimicking Asians for fun. Furthermore, the CEO said that someone who have ugly appearance like Asian are not supposed to wear the company's clothes. Because of the issue, many people have been not wanting to wear apparels from the companies.
Secondly, businesses have to do justice competition with other companies. When I was young, a rumor occurred about one ramen making enterprirse and the issue was that they put toxic ingredient when they make powder for the noodle. The news made demand of the ramen from the company decreasing. After few years later, people found that actually, the rumor was from one of their rivals. Moreover, the competitor have grown due to their cheating. People really felt bad about that and did not want to trust the cheating company anymore. Many people think that was unfair.
To sum up, people who manage their own business have to make their business to be based on the truthfulness. It will be also helpful for making more money due to customers' credibility. For that, they need to think all customers as same human and they never cheat on their competitors.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 581, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
... Because of the issue, many people have been not wanting to wear apparels from the companies. S...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, first, furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, really, second, secondly, so, well, first of all, in other words, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1532.0 1977.66487455 77% => OK
No of words: 310.0 407.700716846 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.94193548387 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19604776685 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55129274938 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 212.727598566 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.551612903226 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 477.0 618.680645161 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.1013476844 48.9658058833 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 76.6 100.406767564 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.5 20.6045352989 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.95 5.45110844103 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.272377808105 0.236089414692 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0815578196794 0.076458572812 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.110269430439 0.0737576698707 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.192193089294 0.150856017488 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.120388896768 0.0645574589148 186% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.08 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.9 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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