Currently the voting age is 18 Some people think the voting age should be changed to 21 Write an op ed piece in which you argue for or against changing the voting age to 21

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Currently, the voting age is 18. Some people think the voting age should be changed to 21. Write an op-ed piece in which you argue for or against changing the voting age to 21.

There is no shortage of debate about the right age that a person should be able to vote. Without a question, many would think the perfect age is 18; other may consider other point of view and would like to change it to 21. As far as I am concerned, I strongly agree with the last group: the voting age should be 21. I feel this way, mainly for two reasons I will explore in the following essay.

First of all, is my opinion that a eighteen years old person is not mature enough to vote. In this fashion, is important to consider how teenagers present a tendency to express ideas and opinions similar as the ones of their belonging groups, like friends and parents. In other words, the need to belong to a group is such a strong feeling between teenager that, very often, their decisions are under the influence of that group. Thus, teenagers have not the enough maturity to face with responsibility the decision to whom to vote, yet.

Secondly, the law lacks of coherence in this topic when allows eighteen years old persons to take some decisions as an adult and prohibit others. To illustrate this idea let's consider the following example. Today, the law allows voting at the age of 18, but prohibits other actions like drinking alcohol. As many could feel, I think voting the wrong person for president could be as dangerous as drinking alcohol if it is done in an irresponsible manner.

In conclusion, I strongly agree with the statement provides by the topic question about changing the voting age to 21. This is better because the voter would be more mature and less influence by his or her belonging group, and because would bring a coherence in the regulation and law for the limited age's rights and obligations.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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... the regulation and law for the limited ages rights and obligations.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, second, secondly, so, thus, i feel, i think, in conclusion, first of all, in other words

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 43.0788530466 51% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1423.0 1977.66487455 72% => OK
No of words: 307.0 407.700716846 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.63517915309 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18585898806 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47588717324 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 212.727598566 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.543973941368 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 440.1 618.680645161 71% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.8104128369 48.9658058833 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.642857143 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.9285714286 20.6045352989 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.78571428571 5.45110844103 143% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.311864468237 0.236089414692 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.112587290806 0.076458572812 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0982853352199 0.0737576698707 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.202335644253 0.150856017488 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.10868746909 0.0645574589148 168% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 11.7677419355 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.63 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.82 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 86.8835125448 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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