Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Children today would be happier if they had fewer possessions. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer
Nowadays children have more possessions than ever before. While it is essential to own necessities such as clothes, it is not crucial to have, say, a television in their bedrooms in order to survive. I believe that if children were in possession of fewer items, they would be far happier.
As with all humans, the more that children have, the more they would want. This is because they get used to having whatever their hearts desire, and therefore, they wish to have more. Once parents begin buying them things they want but do not necessarily need, they start believing that they can always have their own way. Children no longer think this as a favor, rather they feel it is their right. For example, I know a person who, being an only child, was naturally spoiled by her parents. Every few years, she bought an up-to-date phone, even if her older one was functioning perfectly. Once this pattern started, she believed that it was completely acceptable to change phones regularly, and in fact, she felt entitled to it.
These days, children are highly exposed to social media, where they may see other children their age owning items they have their hearts on. They might even compare themselves with their peers based on how much they own. According to them, happiness is measured based on how many items one possesses. This is why we see so many children pestering their parents to buy them new things, and may also throw tantrums if their parents refuse them anything, as is commonly seen in stores.
If they do not have as much, if not more, than their friends, they may feel inferior to them. This can cause several mental health problems, such as depression, stress, and anxiety. For instance, I know a person who was shunned by his friends just because he did not own an Xbox. This child was friendless and felt neglected by his classmates, leading him to socially withdraw. Had his mother not taken steps to prevent his plunging into severe depression, he would not have been the carefree, happy person he is today.
In short, I believe that children should only have things that are fundamental for daily life. However, we have to make sure that the majority of children are treated this way, so that no one child or group of children feel singled out. This has to be a region-wide effort, such as teachers and parents coming together to solve this issue, or else this decision would not be as effective as it seems.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, so, therefore, while, as to, for example, for instance, in fact, in short, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 74.0 43.0788530466 172% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2016.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 427.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.72131147541 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54576487731 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.37327257356 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 236.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.552693208431 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 601.2 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 21.0 9.59856630824 219% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.2055639154 48.9658058833 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.6363636364 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4090909091 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.04545454545 5.45110844103 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.167797930868 0.236089414692 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0584716803898 0.076458572812 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0651938739668 0.0737576698707 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.10616302001 0.150856017488 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0414806477747 0.0645574589148 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 11.7677419355 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.1 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.76 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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