Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Except for doing homework, parents should limit the use of children under the age of 13 on electronic devices such as computers and mobile phones.
By and large, parents have played a paramount role in fostering children from the past to this modern era; so efficacious is children’s training that it can determine their thinking skills, creativity and other features in their future. In this regard, a considerable number of individuals want to know what is the best way of training, especially for children under the age of 13. An outstanding idea is that parents should restrict the using of electronic devices for these children, except when they want to do their homework. I, for one, concur with this notion. In the subsequent paragraphs, I will elucidate my viewpoint in two reasons.
The first reason that crosses my mind is that children are talented to be addicted to these devices. Indeed, computers and mobile phones are so appealing to all people, especially for children. Playing games, taking pictures, and sharing their photos in social media, they find it interesting to spend a major part of their lives on working with these devices. In addition, the more using of electronic devices leads to the more desire of using them. That being said, should parents limit the time of using, it will prevent children’s addiction, and they spend their valuable time on other beneficial entertainments. Take, for instance, a 10-year-old child who really enjoys playing football games on his computer, and his parents let him use the computer just one hour a day, except when he wants to do his assignments. Therefore, he won’t be addicted to his computer, and he can enjoy going out with his friends and exercising.
The second reason that crosses my mind is that by limiting the use of electronic devices for children under 13, they have more concentration in doing other tasks. It stands to reason that spending time on tablets, mobile phones, etc. can reduce the concentration due to the fact that it leads children to have a disorganized mind. Indeed, electronic waves that are produced by these devices are so harmful to children’s mental situation, and it can cause some distractions in their mind. In addition, by using these devices, their brain will be filled with futile information, and this information won’t be cleaned until several days. Thus, when they want to focus on other activities such as reading books or playing music, they find it challenging to focus carefully. However, if they enjoy using their favorite electronic devices for limited hours, they will be able to concentrate more on variable activities. Let’s take the same aforementioned child as an example. Having been allowed to use his computer just one hour a day, he will have more concentration in school’s classes.
To wrap everything up, analyzing all the ideas and reasons, one can conclude it’s better for children to be limited in using electronic devices, especially until the age of 13. This is because not only does it prevent them from addicting to these devices but also they have more concentration on doing other activities.
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Suggestion: focusing; focussing
...playing music, they find it challenging to focus carefully. However, if they enjoy using...
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...concentration on doing other activities. #Wr_Recent
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, really, second, so, therefore, thus, for instance, in addition, such as, by and large
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 65.0 43.0788530466 151% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 69.0 52.1666666667 132% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2541.0 1977.66487455 128% => OK
No of words: 497.0 407.700716846 122% => OK
Chars per words: 5.11267605634 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72159896747 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9054047274 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 240.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.482897384306 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 780.3 618.680645161 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.9492091078 48.9658058833 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.47826087 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6086956522 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.04347826087 5.45110844103 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.291148084188 0.236089414692 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0901641192092 0.076458572812 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0803683861692 0.0737576698707 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.206003390947 0.150856017488 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0296788564563 0.0645574589148 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 11.7677419355 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.24 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 86.8835125448 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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