Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Except for doing homework parents should limit the use of children under the age of 13 on electronic devices such as computers and mobile phones | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Except for doing homework, parents should limit the use of children under the age of 13 on electronic devices such as computers and mobile phones.

In the modern era, electronic devices have made people's lives easier than before, which leads to the ever-increasing use of these devices. There is at least one mobile phone or a computer that can be used in a positive or sometimes negative way in any home. It is a controversial debate over whether to let children use such devices or not. In my opinion, parents should limit the use of their under 13 children on mobile phones and computers. I will explore my viewpoint in the following essay.
First and foremost, children are very susceptible to some detrimental content provided on electronic devices. There are a lot of applications and websites which contain information and pictures which are age-inappropriate for children. When using a mobile phone, they would be bombarded with notifications and advertisements, some of which contain violence or pornography. This would spoil children's mindsets and cause many mental problems in the future. Children have imitative behavior; they tend to copy whatever they see because they are not mature enough to distinguish between good and bad. My personal experience is a compelling example of this. When I was 12, I used to listen to relaxing music before I went to sleep. Once, while I was surfing on the web to seek some new music, an advertisement popped up on the screen about a horror movie. I downloaded the movie, stayed up late, and watched it. It was absolutely one of the worst nights of my childhood. I was terrified, and I could not sleep in my wen room alone for about six months. If my parents were limited in using the mobile phone, I would have never experienced those terrible nights.
Moreover, overusing mobile phones and computers makes children addicted to sedentary activities, which cause physical harm. These days the number of children suffering from obesity is increasing. There are appealing games on electronic with the best graphics and include children's favorite characters. It is absolutely easier and more satisfactory for children to sit all day and play games than having some activity or playing sports. Consequently, their bodies' metabolism decreases, and they would be prone to obesity and neck skeleton problems. In addition, electronic devices radiate some wave that is harmful to children's eyes, and they have to wear glasses from their childhood.
In a nutshell, I believe that parents should limit their children's use of electronic devices. This is because they inevitably contain inappropriate content for children and because they are harmful to their physical health.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, if, moreover, so, while, at least, in addition, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2154.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 419.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.14081145585 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52432199235 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91147344519 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.53937947494 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 690.3 618.680645161 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.8181609406 48.9658058833 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 86.16 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.76 20.6045352989 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.28 5.45110844103 60% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.85842293907 285% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.266288130694 0.236089414692 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0751946018774 0.076458572812 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0763868947901 0.0737576698707 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.180527333808 0.150856017488 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0679926603461 0.0645574589148 105% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.24 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.09 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 86.8835125448 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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