do you agree or disagree with the following statement? famous entertainers and athletics deserve to have more privacy than they have now.use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
That entertainers and athletes play an important role in our society is an undeniable fact. Should people realize the importance of heroes and famous persons in our society, they will ponder our this problem much more scrupulously. deserving on their privacy has recently been the topic of debate among people.
I believe that privacy, that an important part of our life, have decreased among famous persons and people don't respect the privacy of the famous athletes, and these are my justification, to begin with, I read an essay in one of the famous magazine in my province about one of the athletics of our national football team. the journalist wrote an essay about separating him from his wife. I believe that these kind of the issues are personal event in our life, the second reason why An advocate this point of view liaising the fact that social network sites such as Facebook make nobody has privacy life because everybody has some problems don't want that others know about them but in social network every rumor is spread very fast, therefore, we should respect others personality. the last but not the least not only is famous people need to have more privacy but also everybody needs privacy but nowadays, we can see our society doesn't respect privacy in each other.
having discussed the issue from that point of view. I would rather look at it from another perspective as well if famous people have a suitable life, the will not fear when people don't respect their privacy, hence, famous people must observe their lifestyle.
By taking all above-mentioned arguments into consideration, the following conclusion can drown about the issue. Underestimating the privacy of the famous persons in society is not logical. Attending to this issue meticulously contributes to making the perfect relationship in our country, and can improve aspects of societies.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, look, second, so, therefore, well, kind of, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1561.0 1977.66487455 79% => OK
No of words: 310.0 407.700716846 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.03548387097 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19604776685 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64996613176 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 212.727598566 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.554838709677 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 500.4 618.680645161 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6003584229 58% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 102.05428158 48.9658058833 208% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 130.083333333 100.406767564 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.8333333333 20.6045352989 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.33333333333 5.45110844103 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0169135616265 0.236089414692 7% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.00698134895186 0.076458572812 9% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0166572011798 0.0737576698707 23% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0117218735327 0.150856017488 8% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0138163205714 0.0645574589148 21% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 11.7677419355 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.25 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.24 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 86.8835125448 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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