Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The government should support artists rather than allow them to support themselves.
It's a common impression among people that most artists live a difficult life. They've given tremendous time and efforts just in order to compose a masterpiece. However, not so many people are able to appreciate ttheir work, and even few people could afford and willing to buy them. Owing to this fact, I would like to agree that the government should support artists. I would like to address several reasons to substantiate my view.
As I mentioned above, artists always devote themselves into their works. However, they recieve much less realistic feedbacks compared to what they've sacrificed. My art teacher in elementary school used to be an painter. He often thought really hard, like brain-storming, and spent a lot of time in composing a picture. As a result, his work was really inspiring and extraordinary. Yet it seemed like nobody was able to appreciate his work. As he could only made ends meet, he eventually gave up the life as an painter and turned to teach children art. If government was able to suppport them, perhaps things won't go out in that way and we were still able to see his new, beautiful work now.
Some people may claim that there is no reason for government to spend money on protecting artists because artists are not really a necessary job in the society. Nevertheless, I have to argue that art is so important and it often affects us in a invisible way. Art is a part of our education. We teach children to compose or appreciate art works because we now live in a advanced society where there are still something people persue beyond food and security.
The existence of artists can let us view the world with a artistic value. A company can atcually benefit from artists too. For example, a furniture company can sell products that is both well functional and elegant in looking. The latter trait would rely a lot on a artist. And as our society is able to appreciate art, this product would sell well.
To conclude, artists are indespensible to the society and their contribution are huge although people often neglect it. Owing to these facts, government should take some measures to support the artists in order to let their society thrive.
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most artists live a difficult life.
most artists live in a difficult life.
and even few people could afford and willing to buy them.
and even few people could afford and are willing to buy them.
with a artistic value
with an artistic value
can sell products that is both well functional and elegant
can sell products that are both well functional and elegant
Sentence: As he could only made ends meet, he eventually gave up the life as an painter and turned to teach children art.
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Sentence: However, not so many people are able to appreciate ttheir work, and even few people could afford and willing to buy them.
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Sentence: However, they recieve much less realistic feedbacks compared to what they've sacrificed.
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Sentence: If government was able to suppport them, perhaps things won't go out in that way and we were still able to see his new, beautiful work now.
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Sentence: We teach children to compose or appreciate art works because we now live in a advanced society where there are still something people persue beyond food and security.
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Sentence: A company can atcually benefit from artists too.
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Sentence: To conclude, artists are indespensible to the society and their contribution are huge although people often neglect it.
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