No one can deny the importance of arts, but at the same time having well supported athletes can lead to more success in sport's fields for a country. It is my firm belief that having a well funded national sports team, if the funds lead to the team's success, is of greater importance. I will elaborate on this by stating a couple of reasons in the subsequent paragraphs.
To begin with, better supported sports teams will perform better in competitions, this way they have a higher probability of winning in international events such as the Olympics. As well as having the talent and training, athletics require professional trainers, and excellent fields and stadiums depending on the type of the sports, to have more efficient practice. This in turn has a direct effect on their performance and they become more successful in games and competitions. Now having a strong and trained national team will increase the chances of their success and this in turn will lead to the people's satisfaction and happiness.
Second, on the subject of the effects of a team's success on the people of that country, generally, people consider the triumph of their national team a great honor. In a world-wide event such as the Olympics or the world cup, people feel a national pride for their team and deeply care about it's success or failure. When people are invested in such a deep way in their athletics, there's no comparable joy for them than to see their national team win. For instance, I'm not much of a fan of sports myself but my country has a relatively well funded volley ball team that performs relatively good in international events and even i deeply enjoy watching them win and feel proud for my country. As for the people, they take to the streets and celebrate and dance after the wins and they truly feel happy in such moments.
In light of the above mentioned reasons, I strongly believe that more people care about sports than arts, and more support and fund should be put into athletics specially into national teams. This is because a well funded team performs better and wins more and this in turn will lead to having happier people if its even for the limited duration of the international events.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'teams'' or 'team's'?
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Suggestion: peoples'; people's
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, second, so, well, as for, for instance, such as, as well as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 15.1003584229 33% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1828.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 385.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.74805194805 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4296068528 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59276729251 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.472727272727 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 551.7 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 37.1371561559 48.9658058833 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.571428571 100.406767564 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.5 20.6045352989 133% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.92857142857 5.45110844103 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.104308391093 0.236089414692 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0442378529653 0.076458572812 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.048542685478 0.0737576698707 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0800067323798 0.150856017488 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0350034205364 0.0645574589148 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 11.7677419355 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.99 58.1214874552 105% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.57 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.26 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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