While public transportation has always been of great importance, in today's world no one can deny the crucial role that the internet plays in our lives. that being said i personally believe that internet should be made available to everyone and more funding should go to it's development. I feel this way for two reasons which i will explore in the subsequent paragraphs.
To begin with, many important processes can be done and in some cases, must be done over the internet. Paying bills, and generally almost anything related to the banks such as transferring money to different bank accounts, and even some not so important tasks such as shopping can be accomplished by a few clicks on the web. Not to mention some tasks that require internet and can't be done any other way. My personal experience is a compelling example of this. A few months ago, I had to sign up for some courses before the start of the semester in my university. My internet was malfunctioning at the time and i couldn't take the courses in time. As a result, not only my classes were delayed, but also i had to pay extra for the delay i had to take the courses.
Secondly, like I mentioned almost anything can be done using the web and we are no longer required to travel within the city in order to do some routine tasks. We no longer have to go to banks and wait in long queues just to pay some bills or transfer some money. We can even buy the things we need from the many online shopping centers that are available without leaving our houses and they will be delivered right to our doorsteps. This in turn has significantly reduced traffic and made cities less crowded and as a result, allowed us to enjoy a cleaner weather. For instance, the last time i paid my phone bill which was almost due, i did so in my bed without moving an inch just because i had access to the internet.
In conclusion, it is my firm belief that everyone should have access to the internet and the governments should spend more money to make it possible. Because one, some really important tasks require us to have internet and two, by doing things on the internet we are no longer required to even leave our houses to need any kind of transport.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, really, second, secondly, so, while, even so, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, kind of, such as, as a result, in some cases, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1808.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 403.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.48635235732 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48049772903 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52815729028 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.516129032258 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 576.9 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.7792272457 48.9658058833 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.352941176 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.7058823529 20.6045352989 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.23529411765 5.45110844103 169% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.129104793465 0.236089414692 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0441346036997 0.076458572812 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0339884606482 0.0737576698707 46% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0905514977827 0.150856017488 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.036104867324 0.0645574589148 56% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 58.1214874552 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.06 10.9000537634 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.52 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 86.8835125448 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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