Nowadays the marketing of products is very competitive. Companies try different methords and strategies to increase their sells. Sometimes, they hire a famous public figure like an actor or sportsman to advertise their products and sometimes, they brain-wash their customers. In those advertisements, they sometimes go fur beyond reality by making these products much better than they really are. I think most of the time they manipulate the customers by making the products seem much better than they really are.
First of all, Sometimes, they try to attract customers with their famous figures. They hire actors, actress, or even sportsman and these public figures say positive things about the products whether it is true or false. The customers who like these public figures blindly trust them and by these products. For instance, In Africa and the Southern part of Asia, they use cricketers or role models to do advertisements. Surely, these figures charge the most but the companies think that it worth it as they sell more through this kind of advertisement. Moreover, in western culture, people sponson footballers or others to wear their products and often, they publicly name these products.
Secondly, sometimes, advertisement tries to brainwash their customers. In some cases, they say that their products are best in the market or only their products can erase or solve some kind of problems. Even, they try to manipulate their customers by defining something which is not true. For example, in Asia, there are many skin brightening products that publicly declares that real beauty is being a skin that is white. So, most of the women things that it is true and buy these products. They spend a lot of money annually on these kinds of beauty products.
Finally, the advertisement always shows the models who are perfect in every aspect. Those models just wear those products and show off, but the reality is all the people in a certain community are not perfect. For instance, they never show their products with a fat person. They just ignore it. Sometimes, they show something that is not appropriate to that culture. They just show some extended things that do not support the culture.
In Conclusion, most of the time the advertisement companies show their products in a unappropiate manner. To increase their sells they sometimes, hire famous figures or brainwash their customers. So, I think they should stop these kinds of advertisements and show real things.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 84, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, if, moreover, really, second, secondly, so, for example, for instance, i think, in conclusion, kind of, first of all, in some cases, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 63.0 43.0788530466 146% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2090.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 406.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.14778325123 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48881294772 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70196932072 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.448275862069 0.524837075471 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 624.6 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.1908612014 48.9658058833 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.3846153846 100.406767564 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.6153846154 20.6045352989 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.30769230769 5.45110844103 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.204998325248 0.236089414692 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0697175554654 0.076458572812 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0694993439489 0.0737576698707 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.134568407074 0.150856017488 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0711245592576 0.0645574589148 110% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 11.7677419355 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.29 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.22 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 86.8835125448 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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