Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The most important aspect of a job is the money a person earns. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
There are many things come to the question that if people only consider about how much salary they can get when they choose works. In my opinion, admittedly, salary is significant for us to support our lives, but there are more conditions we need to think about when we are finding jobs.
First off, it is paramount for us to consider the working environment and the company’s location. the location of the company decides one’s time allocation on commuting. The nearer company means less time waste on road, which helps people conserve enough energy and enthusiasm to work. People, who live far away, need to spend hours on the way to their company, so that they have to get up much early than people who is resident nearby. Insufficient sleeping time may lead to bad working performance and that will cause the castigate from their boss and the decrease of the salary. Additionally, long time commuting might bring diseases to employees and that will affects their overall wellbeing. Time allocation and people’s health should also be thought about rather than just considering the salary.
Furthermore, the working environment supposes to be quite essential. The environment means not only decoration inside the working place, but also the security of the job. As we all know, there are plenty of high-salary works with danger. For instance, airline attendant and coal miner are all high-paying jobs, but the working environment threats their lives at any time they work like some aerial accidents. Contrasting with the salary, I think safety would be more significant for job seekers to take into account.
To review, firstly, if the location is not convenient enough for employees, the more time they invest on the commuting, the less they can devote into work. Secondly, security should take more account than the salary. All in all, though I admit considering the salary of the job is necessary, I disagree with the idea that the salary is the only thing we need to think over.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, may, second, secondly, so, thus, well, for instance, i think, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 43.0788530466 63% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1675.0 1977.66487455 85% => OK
No of words: 334.0 407.700716846 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01497005988 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27500489853 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65752422571 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.544910179641 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 516.6 618.680645161 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.2415599683 48.9658058833 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.5294117647 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6470588235 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 5.45110844103 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0371071254397 0.236089414692 16% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0138263017221 0.076458572812 18% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0236768049171 0.0737576698707 32% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0275166727197 0.150856017488 18% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0202620082181 0.0645574589148 31% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.98 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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