From the ancient times to the present das all the people living on this planet have never been equally weathly. Personally, I strongly believe that nowadays people are more motivated to help other people who lack the absolute necessities than they were in the past. I feel this way for several reasons which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, every and each one of us has noticed that throughout the last decade the actions for helping the ones in need have multiplied tenfold. In other words, more and more people take the initiative to encouge the others to contribute to this specific cause. My personal experience is a compelling example of this. A few years ago, when I was still in elementary school, I recall that, even though it was the year when a severe economic crisis broke out, there were no events organized in my city in order to gather clothes and food for the people who had become homeless or had lost their jobs. On the other hand, when I was in my final year of high school, I noticed that many different actions of this kind took place. Even my school took part in collecting products which were sent to help the refugees survive, because the government alone was unable to provide them with enough food.
Secondly, in the past many people were unaware of the fact that many people in foreign counties lack things, such as food and clothes, which are essential to ensure their survival. To be more specific, with the advent of the television, it was made easier to raise the awareness and transmit messages to a wider audience. For instance, in the beginning of the century, people solely knew what was happening in the place they lived, for example in their village or in their city. In contrast, when television started braodcasting news from all over the world, people learned about the problems that people in other counties encounter in their everyday lives. As a result, they started to feel more encouraged to help these people as now they are no longer ignorant of the immense hardship they face.
In conclusion, I am of the opinion that people are now more willing to help the ones in need. This is because not only more events are being organized for aiding these people, but a vast number of people have only recenltly acknowledged the fact that many people need their assistance.
- TOEFL T P O 08 Integrated Writing Task 3
- It has been said Not everything that is learned is contained in books Compare and contrast knowledge gained from experience with knowledge gained from books In your opinion which source is more important Why 73
- It has been said Not everything that is learned is contained in books Compare and contrast knowledge gained from experience with knowledge gained from books In your opinion which source is more important Why 73
- A teacher s ability to relate well with students is more important than excellent knowledge of the subject being taught Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer 81
- A teacher s ability to relate well with students is more important than excellent knowledge of the subject being taught Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer 88
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 682, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
...nal year of high school, I noticed that many different actions of this kind took place. Even m...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, second, secondly, so, still, for example, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, in contrast, such as, as a result, first of all, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1932.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 411.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.70072992701 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50256981431 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.38064648713 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.525547445255 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 613.8 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 50.5011989338 48.9658058833 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.75 100.406767564 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.6875 20.6045352989 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.0625 5.45110844103 203% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.377581013658 0.236089414692 160% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.125416287414 0.076458572812 164% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0816904360592 0.0737576698707 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.244557905203 0.150856017488 162% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0583417196258 0.0645574589148 90% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 58.1214874552 94% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.28 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.33 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 86.8835125448 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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