Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their own money at young age.
There is no doubt that children should work on their skills and abilities which are required in the future; therefore, when it comes to discuss on financially duties who must be supervised in adulthood, we have to think about it whether it is important to make effort on this or not. Actually,in my opinion, if we raised our children in order to become financially responsible adults, it would have its own values for two main reasons which the rational reasons behind them will wholly discussed in ensuring paragraphs.
First of all, management is a ability which is required practice. In order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn it and practice it with managing their own money at their youth. Recent studies have illustrated that adults who know how to manage their stuff, especially their money, are whom practiced not only do know when and how save their money, but also know when and how spend it. Consequently, had children made efforts to manage their own money in their youth, they would do best in adolescence.
Another reason that deserve to discussed is that money is one of the most important factor in human life and if people did not know how to manage it, they would lose. In my opinion, managing this vital factor need to pay attention in early stage of human life, in youth. By this example I vividly elucidate my point, when I was young, I was paid in order to bought some snaks for myself every month. At first I spent my money lavishly and by the end of the month I had nothing to spend. As a result, the next month I tought by myself and found that if I spend economically, I should have money at the end of month, then I did it and it worked.
To sum up, children need to pay attention how they spend their money in order to learn how become financially responsible adults, because management is a task that require practice and money is a crucial factor in every human life. Therefore, I suggest to parents to give some fiscal duties to their child.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, consequently, first, if, so, then, therefore, no doubt, as a result, first of all, in my opinion, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1651.0 1977.66487455 83% => OK
No of words: 358.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.61173184358 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34981470047 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51410303788 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 212.727598566 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.480446927374 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 516.6 618.680645161 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 65.712030907 48.9658058833 134% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.0 100.406767564 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.5384615385 20.6045352989 134% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.84615384615 5.45110844103 181% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.350362477151 0.236089414692 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.137869818616 0.076458572812 180% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.15031888478 0.0737576698707 204% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.222461944687 0.150856017488 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.103237000471 0.0645574589148 160% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 11.7677419355 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.99 58.1214874552 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.75 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.49 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 86.8835125448 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 10.002688172 190% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 65.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.5 Out of 30
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