Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their own money at young age. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Money plays a very important role in an individual’s life. There is an old saying that if a person is financially good he can buy anything in this world. Personally, I believe that it will not be a good idea to have children start managing their money at a young age. I feel this way for two reasons which I will explore in this essay.
To begin with, young children are not too much experienced to deal with money. At their age, they should prioritize to do well in their studies or to start getting involved in sports which can help them form a firm career in their future. They are already tired with their everyday school work that having an extra responsibility will feel a great burden for them. My own experience is a compelling example of this. Ten years ago, I used to study in my middle school. My father used to give me ten dollars every week as my pocket-money. Instead of taking that money from him and saving it, I used to ask him to keep that with him and I will take it once I need it. To track my money feels like a task to me and I was already overwhelmed with all my school studies that I was not ready to take a new task. This states that even though we feel that we are ready to take an extra responsibility, but we don’t have enough time or experience to manage that task.
Secondly, it is not fair to say that if a kid starts managing money at young age can only grow into a responsible adult. There are many people who have been ignorant during their childhood and have become great entrepreneurs now. They have become financial gurus for other big companies and are managing large number of transactions for these large multi nationals. For example, my sister used to be spend money wastefully during her young days. My mother used to ask her a lot to keep track of her spending but she never paid attention to her. Now, as she has grown she has been graduated as a financial consultant and is working for a big companies managing their finances without a loss of penny. This depicts that some kids who use to be spendthrift during their childhood turn out to be much responsible in managing money than other are today.
In conclusion, I think it is not a good idea for children to start managing money at young age. This is because children are not experienced enough to take care of money, and because we cannot estimate from a person’s childhood that how he will manage money once he is an adult.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 733, Rule ID: USE_TO_VERB[1]
Message: Did you mean 'used'?
Suggestion: used
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, second, secondly, so, well, for example, i feel, i think, in conclusion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 76.0 43.0788530466 176% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2002.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 453.0 407.700716846 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.41942604857 4.8611393121 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61343653406 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55823699155 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.476821192053 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 634.5 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.8537038156 48.9658058833 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.0 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5909090909 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.31818181818 5.45110844103 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.254361678925 0.236089414692 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0815107701284 0.076458572812 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0569140088136 0.0737576698707 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.159710550954 0.150856017488 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0149012998956 0.0645574589148 23% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.36 10.9000537634 77% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.62 8.01818996416 83% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 86.8835125448 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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