Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Parents should limit their children’s hours of using electronic devices such as video games and televisions.
In today’s world of technological advancement, there are a plethora of alluring devices and activities that hold back the development of children if parents have no control of it. Some people will argue with my point of view, explaining that there are many useful activities including video games. It is a pretty debatable question, but I strongly believe that the disadvantages weight more that advantage here.
To begin with, parents should reduce the amount of time their children spend on video games or TV for a few reasons. The first reason is that children who watch television or play video game too much – they lose their interest in different activities like real games with their peers, chess, sports games, etc. They become addicted to their devices and this state hurt their physical and mental development. Children don’t have any social skills and study skills to improve their ability to deal with the coming school. They lose their interest in the outside world, they become less focused, less communicative and it brings some obstacles for their life. They don’t have particular skills to live in a society. They don’t prepare to become adults and take responsibilities in coping with life as human beings.
The second reason is the detrimental effect of using devices for their entertainments like mental issues. They tend to be more aggressive and cruel to the world around them. In some movies, we can see a lot of blood and things like pornography that children not supposed to see. They might have some deprivation of mind and become criminals in the future. If we take a look at some video games that boys like to play it is all about killing someone to get on the next level, so it teaches them that is normal to kill. There is no such thing in that kind of behavior. It is a huge crime to take life away. Children rise on such cruel content and no one knows who they will become.
To make it vivid, it is obvious that watching television or playing video games leads to some unknown consequences in children psychology if it is inappropriate content. That is why parents should closely control how their kids spending their time and where it will lead them in the future.
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Comments
I recently found out that my…
I recently found out that my son plays in a casino, and at first I thought it was just a computer game, but it turned out that he went to some icysbr.com and plays without my knowledge, in general, you need to carefully monitor your children, because a harmless game in a computer can turn into a game in an online casino
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 724, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...particular skills to live in a society. They don't prepare to become adults and...
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Line 7, column 292, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... where it will lead them in the future.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, look, second, so, kind of, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1851.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 382.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.84554973822 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42095241839 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61203160039 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 212.727598566 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.528795811518 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 572.4 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.4078707317 48.9658058833 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.55 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.8 5.45110844103 51% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.253237445593 0.236089414692 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0746325283984 0.076458572812 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0591014741419 0.0737576698707 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.151864054302 0.150856017488 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0471631643357 0.0645574589148 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.85 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.51 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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