In order to achieve a properous life, more and more emphasis are put on the successful choice of a career path. Admittly, some may argue that it is becoming hard to judge whether a career would be successful or not with the appearance of numerous new industries. However, if viewed from different aspects, I suggest that identifying a secure job is more easier than before.
To begin with, hardly can one choose a appropriate career without having a great insight into the oppotunites. As the society devoloping, the ability to seizing the oppotunity becomes more and more critical. To illustrate my point, my parents choose to go to state-owned companies for their career, which is considered to be the most secure option. However, with the rising of the new technology companies, with creative ideas, the traditional mode of business becomes less competitive. Hence, in the previous year, the precious discrernment is so decisive for a secure career, which is only possessed by the few.
Futhermore, the current technology provides us abundunt resources to professionally access the risk on each occupation in the future. The appearence of handy and powerful for data analysing enable the comparison and predition of job conditions, and, most importantly, making those analysis accessable to everyone. Media would report the current trend and relevant softwares could give us suitable and safe job recommendation based on our preference. For example, when we graduate, we can type in the company appealing to them and the competitive companies online, the finicial performance for the last few years and professional evaluation of the companies are available with just a click of mouse, giving us an overall sense of the current and future development of company and industry.
In conclusion, the elimination of requirement for great insight and the diversity of the information contributes to the identification for a secure future, which is impossible in the past without the aid of newly developed tools.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 350, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'easier' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: easier
...uggest that identifying a secure job is more easier than before. To begin with, hardly c...
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Line 3, column 38, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... To begin with, hardly can one choose a appropriate career without having a gre...
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Line 5, column 276, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this analysis' or 'those analyses'?
Suggestion: this analysis; those analyses
...nditions, and, most importantly, making those analysis accessable to everyone. Media would rep...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, however, if, may, so, for example, in conclusion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 43.0788530466 35% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1697.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 322.0 407.700716846 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.2701863354 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23607819155 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.06732481815 2.67179642975 115% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.596273291925 0.524837075471 114% => OK
syllable_count: 557.1 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.8019334116 48.9658058833 128% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.538461538 100.406767564 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.7692307692 20.6045352989 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.76923076923 5.45110844103 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.151150434759 0.236089414692 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0515299296917 0.076458572812 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0321384384219 0.0737576698707 44% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0887549468024 0.150856017488 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.045422299332 0.0645574589148 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 11.7677419355 134% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 58.1214874552 67% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 10.9000537634 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.63 8.01818996416 120% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 86.8835125448 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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