Some young people don't know what to do after their college, others may have difficulties to choose the suitable graduate schools for them. There are many young people can't make a good decision. I disagree with this statement because of lacking experience, plentiful choices, and the myopia.
First, young people nowadays don't have experience in making decisions. Their parents have built a strong plan for them to face the modern society. For example, the young people in my country usually have to learn how to play musical instruments when they were an elementary school student. Musical teacher usually assign a instrument to him without asking his opinion. They don't have a chance to explore different kinds of instruments and make their own choice. Similarly in choosing their university. If you were a student who has never made a choice on your own, you would probably listen to others' opinion and finally choose the school only based on the ranking.
Second, modern society offers a wide range of choice and excessive information. To be more specific, young people can't make better decision since there's too many choice and decision. For instance, most of young people have to buy a laptop when they became a college student. There are high-performance laptop, light and potable laptop, and the laptop with good color accuracies. If you were a buyer, you would have searched the forums to get some review on these laptops. However, you can screening the right information on these website. Therefore, you don't know how to choose a laptop.
Another concern is that young people are myopia. That is to say they didn't think over a long horizon. For example, after they get their first salary, they may rush to the club to celebrate with friends or buying a video games. They don't build a complete and stable financial plan. They regard their work is not temporary so they didn't leave some part of their salary as cushion for the unexpected medical expense. As a result, they may go into poverty if there's some unexpected events.
In conclusion, as for lacking experience, excessive choices and myopia, I think that young people today can't make a better decisions on their own life.
- TOEFL T P O 44 Integrated Writing Task 3
- A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position 50
- A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you t 75
- In the United States medical information about patients traditionally has been recorded and stored on paper forms However there are efforts to persuade doctors to adopt electronic medical record systems in which information about patients is stored in ele 73
- The following is a memorandum from the business manager of a television station Over the past year our late night news program has devoted increased time to national news and less time to weather and local news During this period most of the complaints re 55
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 19, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
Some young people dont know what to do after their college, ot...
^^^^
Line 1, column 168, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...s for them. There are many young people cant make a good decision. I disagree with t...
^^^^
Line 3, column 30, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...myopia. First, young people nowadays dont have experience in making decisions. Th...
^^^^
Line 3, column 322, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...student. Musical teacher usually assign a instrument to him without asking his op...
^
Line 3, column 375, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...to him without asking his opinion. They dont have a chance to explore different kind...
^^^^
Line 3, column 463, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Similarly,
... instruments and make their own choice. Similarly in choosing their university. If you we...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 115, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...tion. To be more specific, young people cant make better decision since theres too m...
^^^^
Line 5, column 147, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: there's
... people cant make better decision since theres too many choice and decision. For insta...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 303, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'laptops'?
Suggestion: laptops
...ege student. There are high-performance laptop, light and potable laptop, and the lapt...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 490, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'screen'
Suggestion: screen
...view on these laptops. However, you can screening the right information on these website....
^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 525, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this website' or 'these websites'?
Suggestion: this website; these websites
... can screening the right information on these website. Therefore, you dont know how to choose...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 555, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...mation on these website. Therefore, you dont know how to choose a laptop. Another...
^^^^
Line 7, column 70, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
... people are myopia. That is to say they didnt think over a long horizon. For example,...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 233, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...h friends or buying a video games. They dont build a complete and stable financial p...
^^^^
Line 7, column 330, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...ard their work is not temporary so they didnt leave some part of their salary as cush...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 436, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...d medical expense. As a result, they may go into poverty if theres some unexpecte...
^^
Line 7, column 457, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: there's
... a result, they may go into poverty if theres some unexpected events. In conclusio...
^^^^^^
Line 9, column 105, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...myopia, I think that young people today cant make a better decisions on their own li...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, however, if, may, second, similarly, so, therefore, as for, for example, for instance, i think, in conclusion, as a result, that is to say
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1834.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 369.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.9701897019 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38284983912 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49465317875 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.542005420054 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 565.2 618.680645161 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.9785648648 48.9658058833 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 76.4166666667 100.406767564 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.375 20.6045352989 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.41666666667 5.45110844103 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 18.0 5.5376344086 325% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.323126208297 0.236089414692 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0938403174585 0.076458572812 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0860126902295 0.0737576698707 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.215054529004 0.150856017488 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0812711246916 0.0645574589148 126% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.95 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.97 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.