Even though there is a widely held notion that traveling foreign countries is more beneficial, I subscribe to the view that people would enjoy and gain various knowledge and experiences by visiting diverse places in their own country. My reasons for supporting this hypothesis are organized as follows.
First of all, traveling abroad could be significantly more expensive compared to traveling locally. This argument is because the most common way to go to foreign countries is using airplanes. On the contrary, one can visit several places in a particular country utilizing bus services, trains, or even personal cars. Hardly are the prices of such travels comparable to adopting international flights. To be more specific, depending on the size of the country, people can go across the whole area within a few hours with the minimum cost, whereas the expenditures on adopting a single international air flight can be extremely high, specifically during holidays, where the airlines raise their prices exclusively due to the availability of costumers.
Furthermore, there is an embedded advantage in traveling inside one's own country that it would enhance his or her historical knowledge. For example, people often read various materials in the history books in schools about the most famous ancient buildings in their country. However, after a few years, the information is entirely forgotten due to the lack of people's interest in such data. But in case of the actual visit, the knowledge acquired by experience will not quickly fade from individual memories since they perceive the knowledge through experience incorporating all of their senses.
Finally, in most countries, there is a unique language understood by everyone. Therefore, people can go around different places interacting with local people with their own language. This interaction would maximize the enjoyment of the trip since one can completely understand and learn about new cultures. Even in some cases, people might want to migrate to the visited places due to the connection which they established with those people.
With all being said, I draw a conclusion that there are numerous advantages in traveling inside a country, and these benefits are worth so that individual could ignore traveling abroad, indulging with trips to domestic places. In my opinion, such a preference would lead to both financial and social benefits.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, furthermore, however, if, so, therefore, whereas, for example, first of all, in my opinion, in some cases, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 43.0788530466 56% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2046.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 383.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.34203655352 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42384287591 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87079012872 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.587467362924 0.524837075471 112% => OK
syllable_count: 642.6 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 71.0958220781 48.9658058833 145% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.352941176 100.406767564 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5294117647 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.41176470588 5.45110844103 154% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.290013145847 0.236089414692 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.079493143953 0.076458572812 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0693716834058 0.0737576698707 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.157718294081 0.150856017488 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0281829315603 0.0645574589148 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 11.7677419355 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 58.1214874552 70% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 10.1575268817 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.99 10.9000537634 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.51 8.01818996416 119% => OK
difficult_words: 116.0 86.8835125448 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 86.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.0 Out of 30
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