Some peoples contends that today's contemporary world people spend excessive amount of time in their personal enjoyment and hinders their development and cannot reach the pinnacle of their career because they don't engrossed themselves in deeds they must do.They cite the involvement of people in sexual activities as well as alcoholism. However,I strongly disagree with these argument that have been put forwarded by the some peoples and believes that spending the time in personal enjoyment and doing the things that any individual would like to do is better idea than doing the things that any individual must do.I will support my viewpoints with three specific reasons.
First of all, if anyone is devoted to the things they like to do they are fastidious regarding the every details of the subject matters in which they are engrossed.The equation and doing every types of complex task even seems to be a cup of tea for those peoples.The people can have myriad of the information regarding the subject matters.For examples,in many countries parents doesn't seems to be martinet regarding the interest of their children . The children can choose whichever field they have enthusiasm .As a result,the children involve in field they like and reach the apogee of their career.For example, Mark Zuchkerberg the founder of the meta company because of this proper dedication and doing the things he likes to do develop the meta company. In the past many children would not have been able to success in their career because they are deprived from the things they like to do.So, it is obvious for the children or any other human to be involved in the things they like to do in a meticulously manner as a result of which the success and fame can be attained .
Secondly,There is certainty that if anyone is living is life to fullest and enjoying with his life there is minimal chances that the person has to suffer throughout the life.In my locality there used to be two friends and they are having the life of different scenario . One used to do the things he like and doing the things meticulously because of his interest and another friend used to encompassed himself in the things he must do because of the force of his parents .The one who do the things he like to do reached the pinnacle of his career the later one committed the suicide because there was no any enthusiasm he was doing things he should do because of other external forces of his parents .As a result this incident happened.
In a nutshell, the issue of whether many people spend time in things they should do rather than people today engrossed themselves on a personal enjoyment seems no brainer to me .Nevertheless,doing the things people like to do overweigh the importance over people should do.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, nevertheless, regarding, second, secondly, so, thus, well, as to, for example, as a result, as well as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 74.0 52.1666666667 142% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2298.0 1977.66487455 116% => OK
No of words: 472.0 407.700716846 116% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8686440678 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6610686524 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65976817768 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.438559322034 0.524837075471 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 712.8 618.680645161 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 20.6003584229 39% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 59.0 20.1344086022 293% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 68.9270447647 48.9658058833 141% => OK
Chars per sentence: 287.25 100.406767564 286% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 59.0 20.6045352989 286% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 17.0 5.45110844103 312% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 35.0 5.5376344086 632% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.174743275065 0.236089414692 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100320110047 0.076458572812 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0750701796338 0.0737576698707 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.146883892086 0.150856017488 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0837638032953 0.0645574589148 130% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 31.0 11.7677419355 263% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 20.05 58.1214874552 34% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 25.1 10.1575268817 247% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 11.85 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.81 8.01818996416 122% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 86.8835125448 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 29.5 10.002688172 295% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 25.6 10.0537634409 255% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 26.0 10.247311828 254% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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