Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment-doing things they like to do-rather than doing things they should do. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays many people have a large variety of hobbies, and also there are so many entertainment activities such as TV, games, and so on. Some people say they are beneficial because people can refresh by entertainment and concentrate on their tasks more. However, I believe that people today spend too much time on personal enjoyment they like to do instead of the tasks or jobs they should do. The following paragraphs will elaborate on the reasons for this.
First, nowadays universities provide long vacations, and most university students spend most of their vacations on their leisure activities such as traveling, playing games, or playing sports. It is necessary for us to sometimes forget about tasks and enjoy what we want to do and refresh, but spending most vacations for such activities is too excessive. For example, I am a student of University of Tokyo, which is one of the most prestigious universities in Japan. But many of my friends rarely spend their vacation time on studying. Even students in the prestigious university don't study so much, so we can easily imagine the situations in other universities.
Second, most of us have smart phones. Although smart phones are very useful because we can keep our schedules and search immediately on the Internet what we do not know.However, many people waste their time playing games or watching videos on their smart phones.For example one of my friends from my high school was excellent at studying. He always got the best marks in his class. However, his parents bought him a smart phone for his birthday present. After that he got indulged in playing games and watching movies on his smart phone. His academic performance got worse and worse, and in the end he failed the university entrance exam. Many people spend much of their time on their smart phones in vain as my friend in this example. When I get trains, many people seated are playing games, even elderly people do.
Third, now we can have access to many kinds of social network services on the Internet. Of course it is important for us provide information about what we are doing because this might help others solve problems or come up with new ideas. However, nowadays we are too much dependent on social network services. By using social network services, we can feel close to other people, so it is comfortable for some people to always use social network services. Actually, some years ago I was enjoying using Twitter and always trying to keep up with timelines. Because of this I wasted my time and I could not spend enough time on reviewing my classes.
To sum up, people are spending too much of their free time on their leisure activities. We should spend more time on dealing with what we have to do. Then the economic situations will improve and technology will develop more and more.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, however, second, so, then, third, for example, of course, such as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2351.0 1977.66487455 119% => OK
No of words: 485.0 407.700716846 119% => OK
Chars per words: 4.84742268041 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69283662038 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58197517659 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 227.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.468041237113 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 733.5 618.680645161 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.86738351254 375% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.2051405622 48.9658058833 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.4230769231 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6538461538 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 5.45110844103 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.226688898023 0.236089414692 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0694963432652 0.076458572812 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.105109547255 0.0737576698707 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.15417377547 0.150856017488 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0864502745749 0.0645574589148 134% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 11.7677419355 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.85 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.69 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 86.8835125448 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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