In today’s progressive world we live, with the hectic life which every one of us is experiencing, human beings’ desire and demands have changed drastically. While some people stand to reason that nowadays, people spend a large amount of their time doing what they love, others stand at the opposite side of this continuum and believe that each person has less time to enjoy personal interests. I am of the conviction that in today’s revolutionary era, people consider their gratification as the next priority. In the ensuing paragraphs, I will provide some convincing reasons to substantiate my viewpoint.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that the competing world does not allow people to allocate enough time to leisure activities. It goes without saying that owing to the thriving technology, jobs have become more complicated and require professional skills harder than before. Thus, if one wants to prosper in an aspect of life, ones must spend a lot of extra time to become excel in that realm; inevitably, some task has to be left. As a case in point, the university entrance exam in my country is intensely struggling. When I decided to become an excellent engineer and pass the exam, I had to cease practising the violin, which I enjoy a lot. Fortunately, I could enter a prestigious university that year. Had I not allocated enough time to study for the entrance exam, I would have jeopardized my chances to become a great engineer. It can be concluded that sometimes one has to sacrifice his or her comfort to survive in this sophisticated world.
The second equally significant reason which is worth mentioning is the idea that the growth of population and the number of metropolitan cities, attributes to wasting a great deal of peoples’ time in the hustle and bustle of the urban areas. A person living in a big city has to commute a considerable distance to go to work, university, shopping, to name but a few. This commuting may take long hours and deprive people of using their time doing what they really want. For example, my university is in the east of Tehran, and I live in a flat in the west part of this huge city. Each day that I have a class, I have to spend three hours in the traffic jam going from home to university and vice versa.Therefore, when I come back, I feel exhausted to do leisure activities.
To conclude, considering the above-mentioned reasons, one can conclude that owing to the hectic life and amount of competitions in all facets of life, nowadays, people spend less time on personal enjoyment rather than other activities.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 708, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Therefore
... from home to university and vice versa.Therefore, when I come back, I feel exhausted to ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, really, second, so, therefore, thus, while, as to, for example, i feel
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2166.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 445.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.86741573034 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.59293186426 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94811762839 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 242.0 212.727598566 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.543820224719 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 702.9 618.680645161 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.7173288054 48.9658058833 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.333333333 100.406767564 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.7222222222 20.6045352989 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.05555555556 5.45110844103 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.200689389904 0.236089414692 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0533399280067 0.076458572812 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0704581472252 0.0737576698707 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.127057323724 0.150856017488 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0559800593539 0.0645574589148 87% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 11.7677419355 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.45 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 86.8835125448 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 88.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.5 Out of 30
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