Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
People who develop many different skills are more successful than people who just focus on only one skill.
In the modern-day, success plays a prominent role in all societies. Owing to it is paramount importance, a large number of scientists have always been searching for ways to enhance the success of people in their jobs. A controversial question that deserves some words here is whether or not an individual who has several skills will become a success or a person who focuses only on one skill has provoked among people. I personally assert that people who learn many skills are more successful compare to the other ones. In what follows, the most clear-cut reasons will be discussed.
The first argumentative factor to take into account is that people with several skills earn extra money rather than others. To shed more light on this matter, in the modern era, living expenses are at a high level, and most people work full time for earning more money for their life. However, most of them, especially both workers and employees, always struggle with financial problems; hence, if a person has several skills in different fields, he would start either the second job or establish his own business. In this situation, they can solve a variety of problems. For example, consider a chemical engineer who has adequate skill in computer, for instance. In this situation, she works as an engineer at a well-known company, and her occupation is related to her field of study; therefore, she earns a regular salary from this company. Moreover, because of her proficiency as a computer programmer, she would be able to attain some projects that need a person who becomes an expert at some programs such as Matlab, Hysis, and Aspen plus. In other words, she earns extra money from a secondary carrier.
Another equally significant point is that skills people do not have any worries about being fire from their main job. To elaborate on my point, since individuals become experts in a variety of fields, they do not have to worry about getting fire from their work. In this situation, they would be able to either find another job readily or starting their own occupations. Furthermore, most famous companies and factories are following labour forces who have several abilities in different fields. For example, a tire company always search mechanic engineers for working in a research and development department. They want their mechanic engineers not only to have both enough and adequate information on the mechanic engineer but also have information and knowledge about characteristics of components that are using in for producing tires.
Taking all aforementioned reasons and examples into account that citizens who have various skills are more prosperous than other people. I believe that these people not only do earn more money but also do not have any worry about being fired from their main job.
- TPO 47 - Integrated Writing Task 78
- TPO 34 70
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement People who develop many different skills are more successful than people who just focus on only one skill 73
- TPO 25 80
- It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents jobs than to choose jobs that are very different from their parents job 66
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 106, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...s. Owing to it is paramount importance, a large number of scientists have always been searching f...
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Line 2, column 277, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
...estion that deserves some words here is whether or not an individual who has several skills wi...
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Line 5, column 237, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled as one.
Suggestion: fulltime
...e at a high level, and most people work full time for earning more money for their life. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, moreover, second, so, therefore, well, for example, for instance, such as, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2360.0 1977.66487455 119% => OK
No of words: 465.0 407.700716846 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0752688172 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64369019777 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65789399878 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 240.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.516129032258 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 732.6 618.680645161 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 12.0 4.94265232975 243% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.220257118 48.9658058833 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.380952381 100.406767564 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1428571429 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.66666666667 5.45110844103 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.277720306552 0.236089414692 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0848570138995 0.076458572812 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0884538238341 0.0737576698707 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.194589036423 0.150856017488 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0831069681429 0.0645574589148 129% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.56 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 86.8835125448 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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