There is no shortage of debates whether spending time on the internet is beneficial to children. In my opinion, I completely agree with the idea that computer games adverse children, so parents must ban them to play these games. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay,
To begin with, children would not communicate with their peers and behave as a self-reserved person. This is because that they obsess themselves with game, which wastes children’s most time on computer. My brother Ali’s experience is compelling example of it. About two years ago, he spent his all time to Point blank, a game consisted of many competitions and challenges. His teacher reported my parents that his grades on school was low than average, and Ali’s friends treated him badly. My parents refrained him from using computer and registered Ali to judo sport, in which he could get many friends and be a sociable person. Moreover, Ali improved his communication skills with his schoolmates, so the problems were reduced between them. As a result, If my parents had ignored their son’s problem, Ali would have stressed and could not think about any things other than computer game.
Secondly, computers release the ultraviolet rays to the people, which reduces vision skill of them. This is obvious that most people suffer from this problem in the modern world. It is said computer radiation affects children more than adults because of their weak immune system. For example, I had a vision problem two years ago because I used up my most time on the internet. My friend recommended me to check on the hospital. The doctor told me that I should reduce my time on computer and walk on the clear air. I was keen on doctor’s all advices, so my vision ability returned to its previous condition. As a result, If I did not go to the doctor to check, my eyes would lose its vision ability day by day.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that parents must prohibit their children to play computer games. This is because that these games influence children badly and do them more stressful person. Also, this games are harmful to children’s health, and radiation from computer decreases people’s vision
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- TOEFL T P O 47 Integrated Writing Task 52
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, for example, i feel, in conclusion, as a result, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 59.0 43.0788530466 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1880.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 379.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.96042216359 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41224685777 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7244018574 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.548812664908 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 570.6 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 28.5665075127 48.9658058833 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 89.5238095238 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0476190476 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.66666666667 5.45110844103 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.197253529603 0.236089414692 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.063795615773 0.076458572812 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0570659076205 0.0737576698707 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.143707526891 0.150856017488 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0542656660581 0.0645574589148 84% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.19 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.36 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 86.8835125448 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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