Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict.
In today’s society, there are many prevalent social norms,which young people have to conform to. Yet, now a debate has arisen whether these rules are too strict for young people. In my perspective, these obligations are harsh.
First, some parents want their children to do jobs that they want, notably jobs that often bring money and prestige like doctors or engineers. Certainly, these occupations may not be what young people want to do when they grow up. However, pressured by their parents, they have to stop pursuing their real dreams, which can cause them a dreadful and arduous life. I had a cousin who experienced the same thing. His desire was to be a journalist, but his parents demanded him to be a doctor. However, as he was not initially passionate about being a doctor, he soon could not keep up with his Biology class. As a result, he dropped the class and his parents never saw him again. Now, he is working to cover all his expenses including tuition by himself, which is really rough for someone still in school. Therefore, I believe children should be allowed to choose their own profession and parents should respect their decisions.
Second, at school, some rules may restrain students’ creativity or not allow them to expand their potential. For example, because I wanted to outsmart other classmates, I searched the Internet for some ways that can only be taught in higher classes. When an exam came, I applied the knowledge that I had learned before to doing the test. At first, I thought I was going to get a high score for my unique ways. Unfortunately, my teacher gave me a low score on this test and said I was not allowed to use these methods. I was confused because all math knowledge will be learned sooner or later, so there should not be any trouble when some students are curious about more complicated knowledge and decide to study it earlier than other people. Yet some teachers want those kinds of students to maintain the same pace with the school curriculum, which in turn hinders them.
In conclusion, many rules at the present are too strict since they oblige young people to do things that are not within their interests and to learn knowledge that only attaches to their age without letting them create their own paths.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 58, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , which
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, really, second, so, still, therefore, as to, for example, in conclusion, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1888.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 395.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.77974683544 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45809453852 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47983697279 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.577215189873 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 564.3 618.680645161 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.7586379622 48.9658058833 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.4 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.75 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.7 5.45110844103 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.101156809208 0.236089414692 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.032542272592 0.076458572812 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0489074357743 0.0737576698707 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0908713720776 0.150856017488 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.059274124027 0.0645574589148 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.44 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.9 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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