Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Submitted by Dozer on Sun, 03/04/2018 - 18:18

These days, in many countries democracy is thriving, and because of this young people have more freedom than their parents had. Personally, I think that in modern society, adolescents do not have to follow strict rules. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, contemporary women can choose who they will marry to and live their lives with. In the past, in many cultures, this choice was made by parents of young ladies. My mother`s experience is a compelling example of this. I am from Russia, the country of many nationalities. As my mother told me, when she was a high school student, many of her classmates already knew who they will marry to. This is because it was a common practice when parents looked for a couple for their daughters. Preferences of a bride, by the way, parents did not consider, and so many girls had to become wives of men, whom they even did not like. Although in remote parts of the country some families still follow this tradition, the majority of women in Russia can decide themselves who they will link their future with. That is why I believe that millennials are more independent now.
Secondly, nowadays youngsters can choose whether obtain a college education or start working right after the graduation from high school, and they will not be judged by society for their decisions. Conversely, a few decades ago young people were forced to acquire a university degree, otherwise, they were considered lazy or not intelligent enough. For instance, my husband does not have a college degree. He decided to become a farmer after high school. He worked physically hard to make alife. However, many of his peers laughed at him and told that in order to be respected by others he had to go to college first. On the contrary, these days if a person lacks a university degree but works on land, he is highly appreciated by people from his community.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that modern adolescents are not expected to obey strict rules. This is because contemporary girls can marry whoever they want, and because guys can decide whether or not they will study in an institution.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 21, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'countries'' or 'country's'?
Suggestion: countries'; country's
These days, in many countries democracy is thriving, and because of t...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 189, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
... they want, and because guys can decide whether or not they will study in an institution. ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 239, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... not they will study in an institution.
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, conversely, first, however, if, look, second, secondly, so, still, for instance, i feel, i think, in conclusion, by the way, first of all, on the contrary

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1808.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 378.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.78306878307 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40933352052 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64003137937 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.55291005291 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 567.9 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.2995472869 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.0952380952 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.57142857143 5.45110844103 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.88709677419 246% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0925916275338 0.236089414692 39% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0297153560948 0.076458572812 39% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0390646684172 0.0737576698707 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0667701033711 0.150856017488 44% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0398014821377 0.0645574589148 62% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 11.7677419355 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.15 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.83 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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