Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict.
Following rules assigned by the society is inevitable and any individual regardless of his age, role, and gender should follow them. The author has asserted that the current rules obeyed by youths are restricted. This is the claim with which I generally do not concur. Among the countless reasons which give adherence to my viewpoint, I would list the most conspicuous ones in what follows.
The first striking reason which should be highlighted here is the increment of awareness. Indeed, in modern life, according to the enhancement of science and human being's understanding from his surroundings leads to increase of individual's awareness toward his right. In this case, the possibility of implementation and ordering strict rules is low. A lucid example which shed the spotlight on this issue is the instance of the current generation and previous one's life. While in the thirty years ago, the young have to obey the elder's advice and recommendation, in current society, there is no such unconditional obeyance by youth. The similar condition applies to the legislation system too; if a society asks its young individuals to accept and follow a specific rule which is rejected or considered awkward by other societies, they will not follow until they get cognition over its logic base. Therefore, current youth does not accept any rule without getting familiar with its logic foundation.
Another equally noteworthy reason which should be considered is current young are eager to persuade their freedom. In fact, based on the previously discussed awareness, a person's soul gets beyond the boundaries and seeking liberties. This fact is also verified by the intelligent research recently conducted by the Sociology Department of the Tehran University in Iran. According to this study, the status of knowledge and understanding has a cogent link with the freedom-seeking spirit of the person; by the increment of cognition, an individual gives more price to freedom. Consequently, by the enhancement of awareness, the youth is more eager to find his liberties. In this scenario, is it feasible to force this group to follow a restricted rule?
However, some people believe that nowadays a concrete legislation system is implemented in society; thus, young have to accept this restriction. Although this is a sound belief, and the current world has aligned the laws and rules; this group actually underestimate another fact that this restriction is applied to entire people and the young generation is not exceptional from it. Thus, a legislation environment in which everyone has to difference the laws, the young generation also has to. Besides, this inclined pressure by the laws should not by merely compared between two generations of youth, it should be considered in a holistic way between entire people among two periods.
To wrap it up, all the aforementioned reasons and facts explicitly illustrate that current youth does not obey the restrict rules unconditionally, since it has increased its understanding, seeking its freedom; moreover, the increased restriction is a holistic way and not solely includes the young generation.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 530, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'elders'' or 'elder's'?
Suggestion: elders'; elder's
...y years ago, the young have to obey the elders advice and recommendation, in current s...
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Line 7, column 627, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a holistic way" with adverb for "holistic"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...tions of youth, it should be considered in a holistic way between entire people among two periods...
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Line 9, column 112, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...strate that current youth does not obey the restrict rules unconditionally, since it has inc...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, besides, consequently, first, however, if, moreover, so, therefore, thus, while, as to, in fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 68.0 52.1666666667 130% => OK
Nominalization: 27.0 8.0752688172 334% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2654.0 1977.66487455 134% => OK
No of words: 499.0 407.700716846 122% => OK
Chars per words: 5.31863727455 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72634191566 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01314584368 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Unique words: 257.0 212.727598566 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.51503006012 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 820.8 618.680645161 133% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 13.0 3.08781362007 421% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 12.0 4.94265232975 243% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.5091585769 48.9658058833 130% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.636363636 100.406767564 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6818181818 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.04545454545 5.45110844103 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.186369849654 0.236089414692 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0554266451825 0.076458572812 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0569465960833 0.0737576698707 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.111265733944 0.150856017488 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0601895328685 0.0645574589148 93% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 11.7677419355 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.87 10.9000537634 127% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.25 8.01818996416 115% => OK
difficult_words: 143.0 86.8835125448 165% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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