Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Telephone has greater influence on people’s lives than television has.
The impact of technological advances on our life is a very significant matter. About invention of telephone and television, ideas are really different. The opinions are divided as to whether the effect of telephone is more noticeable or the invention of television. When it comes to me, it is my firm conviction that the effects of telephone are more than television. To support this, there are several reasons, two of which are going to aptly explored in the following.
First and foremost, telephone is a means of communication but television's main function is recreation. Communication of people, companies and in bigger scale countries is an indispensible subject. However, human beings is able to eliminate the recreational activities in their lives or at least they can turn or change them to other forms. For instance, instead of watching TV, people are able to spend their leisure time in theathers or amusement parks. On the other hand, eliminating of communicational devices such as telephone from our lives is not possible anymore. Take parents who send their child overseas in order to university education. The most reliable means of preserving their relationship is calling by this great invention called, telephone.
The second reason coming to mind is rooted in the fact that telephone is the basis of internet's invention. I have read in a scientific article that big companies have had a network in their internal structure by using of telecommunication technique, exploiting wires and cables, and very similar to our current Internet in order to improve their internal integrity. Needless to say, Internet is the greatest achieavement of the current century and the basis of this great invention, which is telephone, is invaluable as well.
In brief, I believe that telephone is more influential on people's lives. Since not only people can be keep in touch with their important persons but also telecommunication is the basis of Interent which has been altered our whole life in different aspects.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 178, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
...lly different. The opinions are divided as to whether the effect of telephone is more noticea...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, really, second, so, well, as to, at least, for instance, in brief, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 43.0788530466 60% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1696.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 326.0 407.700716846 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.20245398773 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24917287072 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.097116085 2.67179642975 116% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.579754601227 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 546.3 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.6045132229 48.9658058833 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.7647058824 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1764705882 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.29411764706 5.45110844103 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.109347525539 0.236089414692 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0363410002226 0.076458572812 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0359254163135 0.0737576698707 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0650463203469 0.150856017488 43% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0307114034954 0.0645574589148 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 11.7677419355 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 58.1214874552 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.88 10.9000537634 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.03 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 86.8835125448 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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