Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In twenty years there will be fewer cars in use than there are today. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In twenty years there will be fewer cars in use than there are today. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Submitted by yjkim192 on Wed, 10/03/2018 - 04:19

Transportation has developed throughout the human history. Every time people find faster and better methods of transportation they changed their vehicles. It’s just a matter of time when people will change their cars to a different type of vehicle. Personally, I believe we are close for another change of transportation.

The main reason I assert this is because transportation methods that were expensive are getting cheaper. Twenty years ago it cost a lot of money to even pay for a short trip using an airplane. However, because of scientific development and fuel efficiency rising, it is much more affordable for even normal people to ride airplanes. Now it is no big deal if you are not taking a trip longer than 3 hours. Thus, people will start using planes instead of driving for hours to get from one place to another.

Also, we might soon see a different type of vehicle. There are news articles saying that a small flying vehicle is under development. If this new flying vehicle comes out of the market people will start to use this because it is much faster and there will be no worries for traffic jam. Since this new type of vehicle will be much more efficient than riding a car more people will start using this new vehicle and fewer cars. It is just like how people transition from horses to cars in the past.

Finally, it is evident that cars are destroying the environment and it is a global concern. Therefore, governments will try to prevent people overusing cars. They will make policies to encourage people to use public transportation and advertise people to walk short distance. As people get educated by this agenda more people will start finding different ways of transportation. Overall, less people will drive their car out to the streets.

To sum up, scientific enhancement has made advance transportation more affordable to people and even further enough to introduce new types of transportation, on top of that people will be educated to use fewer cars. Thus, it is clear to me that in twenty years there will be fewer cars out the streets compare to today.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 278, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...dvertise people to walk short distance. As people get educated by this agenda more...
^^
Line 7, column 390, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun people is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...ferent ways of transportation. Overall, less people will drive their car out to the ...
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, however, if, so, therefore, thus, to sum up, on top of that

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1748.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 360.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.85555555556 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35587717469 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75095381887 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 544.5 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.2796625874 48.9658058833 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.2380952381 100.406767564 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.1428571429 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.52380952381 5.45110844103 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.193277044679 0.236089414692 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0618062615483 0.076458572812 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0624333640736 0.0737576698707 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123388891178 0.150856017488 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0637427279067 0.0645574589148 99% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 11.7677419355 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.61 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.46 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 86.8835125448 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

flaws：

the topic is not exactly right on the topic. need to say :

whether In twenty years there will be fewer cars in use than there are today.

//need to be straightforward. 'more or less cars'.

not:
'Personally, I believe we are close for another change of transportation.'

so the first and second reason are out of topic.

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suppose this essay is right on the topic, the main issue of the essay is 'unique words and difficult words'. That's reason the e-grade gave it only 18 out of 30.

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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 15 in 30
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 360 350
No. of Characters: 1693 1500
No. of Different Words: 180 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.356 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.703 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.652 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 115 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 75 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 41 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 34 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.143 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.671 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.429 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.322 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.53 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.128 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5