Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Young people today have no influence on the important decisions that determine the future of society as a whole.
Broadly speaking, in the current state of affairs we observe, in which better society is of great importance, it is not wrong if one was to say that young people play a key role to that end. However, whether they can influence the society or not has long been considered as a subject of debate among academicians. one popular opinion regarding this issue states that young people have no influence on the important decisions that determine the future of society as a whole, citing a number of reasons in its support. I, personally, concur with this thesis. In what follows, I will attempt to clarify my decision by focusing on 2 reasons.
one important reason coming to my mind at first is that today's young people are less independent. In this modern era, young people rely on their parents so much. parents have fewer children in comparison to past and they pay more attention to their children. The more someone receives so much attention from their parents, the less they do their duties. Needless to say that when young people should decide in their lives because they are not independent person, they cannot make decision easily. Take a 22 years old boy for instance and let's assume he graduates from university. he decides to live alone and he cannot make a decision about what house should he choose and always ask his parents opinion and consider what they think. so, if he cannot decide a simple thing for his life, how he can influence the whole society.
Another reason that can be mentioned in these lines is that young people concentrate only on their own lives. As human beings, we face so many difficulties in our lives that we should focus on our own lives. young people should think about so important things, such as they should think about their jobs, incomes, place to live, marriage and so on. they do not have time to think about other things. so, they cannot have an important influence on society compared to their parent who is retired and stay at home. For instance, I never participated in presidential elections of my country and I know that it has a powerful influence on my society and my life in as much as I cannot find a time to research about candidates and always focus on my works.
To sum up, in my point of view, young children cannot have an influence on the important decisions in their society. they are not independent individuals and they always rely on their parents for decision making so they cannot make important decisions for their society. Moreover, they live in a very sophisticated era that should only concentrate on their own lives.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, moreover, regarding, so, as to, broadly speaking, for instance, such as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 67.0 43.0788530466 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2142.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 455.0 407.700716846 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.70769230769 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61852021839 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51535557043 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.47032967033 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 674.1 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.6585869397 48.9658058833 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.3636363636 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6818181818 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.63636363636 5.45110844103 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.227537596245 0.236089414692 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0770479836791 0.076458572812 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0761315237049 0.0737576698707 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.161701589405 0.150856017488 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0734734223536 0.0645574589148 114% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.04 10.9000537634 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.34 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 86.8835125448 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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