Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Educating children is a more difficult task today than it was in the past because they spend so much time on cellphone, online games, and social networking Web site.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In the modern era, education plays a pivotal role in training workforce and citizens of a country. In order to provide the needed education, teachers and professors at schools and universities try their best to teach the essential and fundamental lessons to students. Such efforts should be even more at schools where consists of a younger population who are more susceptible and are not as experienced and knowledgeable as adults. Moreover, the changes in the environment and technology have made the educating task different. In this regard, some people are inclined toward the fact that educating children has become a more difficult task today than previous decades since children are more occupied with technological gadgets while others believe that the technology's merits overweight its demerits. I personally adhere to the first view. In the following paragraphs, two significant reasons will be illustrated.
The first aspect to point out is that nowadays the school classes' shapes and qualities are a lot different with compared to before. During the classes, a lot of students may be occupied with their cellphones playing games, surfing the Internet, etc. and as a result, they don't listen to the teacher. The inadequate and imperfect learnings of the students make it hard for the teacher to teach and convey concepts to all students. Moreover, it becomes extremely heavy and burdensome for them to attract everyone's attention. Therefore, teachers should undergo special pieces of training on how to control such children. To make my point clear, take my personal experience for example. During junior high school level, I remember a few students had cellphones and even those who had, wouldn't bring it to school. But, at high school, almost everyone would bring their cellphones to the classes and we were all engaged with playing with our phones, taking photos, playing games, etc. By comparing both educational levels, now I notice that spending time on cellphones, games and social networks during classes affects the quality of the classes dramatically.
Furthermore, children spend less time doing their assignments at homes. They spend a lot of time playing games, chatting with friends, etc. which sounds pretty interesting to them. These activities would even become obsessive for them and they may spend hours on these activities rather than studying and doing homework. Most parents cannot even control them since such activities have caused the children to become aggressive to others who try to prevent them from playing or spending time with their phones. For instance, my cousin used to be a good student. Ever since his parents bought him a PS4, he spent most of his time playing. He would always shout when his parent tried to stop him from playing and his grades at schools declined significantly.
To recapitulate, all aforementioned reasons lead us to the fact that attracting the students' attention and teaching to them has become a laborious task these days. Although technologies like the Internet and educational applications can provide beneficial information and training for children, they mostly make the student's minds busy whether in school hours or at home. In other words, modern gadgets have influenced the students in a way that not only don't they pay attention during the classes but also they don't do their homework perfectly.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, while, for example, for instance, as a result, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 13.8261648746 174% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 70.0 52.1666666667 134% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2845.0 1977.66487455 144% => OK
No of words: 542.0 407.700716846 133% => OK
Chars per words: 5.24907749077 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.82502781895 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76709283177 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 286.0 212.727598566 134% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.527675276753 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 847.8 618.680645161 137% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.4272490803 48.9658058833 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.607142857 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3571428571 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.5 5.45110844103 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.183185066021 0.236089414692 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0472401845426 0.076458572812 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0479432698222 0.0737576698707 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.114601044608 0.150856017488 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0268816486964 0.0645574589148 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.17 10.9000537634 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.6 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 138.0 86.8835125448 159% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 10.002688172 125% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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