Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Famous entertainers and athletes deserve to have more privacy than they have now.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
I disagree with this statement that in the past, it was easier to select a job that leads you to success and secure life at the same time. I feel this way for two main reasons which I explore in the following essay.
The first and foremost reason of the aforementioned notion is that technology is changing with high-speed of itself. In the past, about fifty years ago until now, technology has altered more than everywhen. For example, about a hundred years ago, that people drove wagons with horses, it was a well-paid job, and most of the wealthy people rent these drivers and their wagons for travel. And sometimes travel prolonged about a couple of months and after travel, those wealthy people paid a tremendous amount of money to the driver. it was possible that if drivers traveled for about three months, they could earn money for nearly a year. but after the industrial revolution, wagons altered to machines that worked with fossil fuels. this moment drivers should learn how to drive a car instead of a horse so much so that driving a horse not only was not successful for them, but also it was not secure for their subsistence. so, most of the jobs were available and profitable for a small period.
Another conspicuous reason of the above-stated phenomenon is that success and secure life or job always conflict with each other. if an individual wants success, he or she could not have security and severity in his or her life. For instance, consider a person that his or her primitive priorities are prosperous in a job and gain money as much as he or she can; however, this person may be a successful person but without shallow of doubt he or she could not and will not experience security and severity of life because if an individual wants something special, he or she should lose specific things.
By way of conclusion, with all this taken into account all the above reasons, I am of the opinion that in the past maybe people hypothesize that a job would be successful and secure, but this is efficient for a small period, and they cannot expand the job for their entire life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, so, well, for example, for instance, i feel
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 13.8261648746 181% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1732.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 373.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.64343163539 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39467950092 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4996689903 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.514745308311 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 539.1 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 81.8681431153 48.9658058833 167% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.714285714 100.406767564 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.6428571429 20.6045352989 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.64285714286 5.45110844103 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0902388818656 0.236089414692 38% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0392665402647 0.076458572812 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0326042975926 0.0737576698707 44% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0614063734078 0.150856017488 41% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0341513611321 0.0645574589148 53% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 62.01 58.1214874552 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.93 10.9000537634 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.97 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 68.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.5 Out of 30
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