Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Schools (universities, colleges, and high schools) should teach students about specific careers and jobs instead of general subjects.
Schools play a major role in daily life of every member of a society, starts from one's
childhood to adulthood , for it is the place where knowledge is found and gained. Without a
shadow of a doubt, schools, particularly universities, colleges, and high schools are the
places where people develop their skills throughout different courses they learn. Although
there is a consensus on the very essence of schools and their profound effects on different
aspects of life, there is a controversy amongst different people about whether schools should
teach students about specific careers and jobs instead of general subjects.
To begin with, it should be mentioned that as a general rule of thumb, one who wishes to
reach something valuable must spend one of his or her precious prosperity, instead. In this
manner, if a person wants to be taught either about specific careers or general subjects, he
must devote his invaluable treasure, time. Regarding this fact, since each person wants to
take advantage of his limited time as much as possible, it is crystal clear that the priority
of learning about specific careers will heighten much more than general subjects.
Consequently, based on this intrinsic intention, schools will be requested to spend more time
teaching about specific jobs rather than general subjects.
A second point is that if schools offer carrier education, learning about unnecessary
material can be avoided. This will help students and learners to focus accurately on their
education. Plus, educating students about careers not only will afford them a golden
opportunity to increase their chance applying for a job, but also will pave the way for
thriving on their job responsibilities. After all, in the job environment, job skills are
much more appreciated than pure knowledge, for a person who has acquired career education
does better know how to adapt himself to the environment and his colleagues in comparison to
a person who is the champion of solving pure mathematics and physics problems on exam paper.
Finally, a person's ultimate goal is to work in order to earn money. Students are being taught
in order to use their skills and give service to the society they live in, in the future. In
addition, the more they become skillful in their job proficiency, the more they will be
promoted. In this occasion, schools can help student achieve this goal much more faster and
easier via teaching them careers and jobs education. However, there is one significant
exception about general subjects and it is related to those persons who want to work in an
academic environment. Again, as this portion of the students who needs to be taught about
general subjects constitutes minority of the whole community, this does not contradict
justifications proposed above.
In conclusion, I strongly assert that it is absolutely essential for schools to teach
students about specific careers and jobs rather than general subjects since, in my opinion,
the former is much more advantageous than the latter.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
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Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 71.0 52.1666666667 136% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2593.0 1977.66487455 131% => OK
No of words: 493.0 407.700716846 121% => OK
Chars per words: 5.25963488844 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71206996034 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74020661962 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 250.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.507099391481 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 775.8 618.680645161 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 14.0 4.94265232975 283% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 65.9968433589 48.9658058833 135% => OK
Chars per sentence: 144.055555556 100.406767564 143% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.3888888889 20.6045352989 133% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.88888888889 5.45110844103 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 35.0 4.53405017921 772% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 34.0 5.5376344086 614% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.324640504501 0.236089414692 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.107117517695 0.076458572812 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0871629879836 0.0737576698707 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0865952554207 0.150856017488 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.100718146848 0.0645574589148 156% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.0 11.7677419355 144% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 58.1214874552 76% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 10.9000537634 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.98 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 125.0 86.8835125448 144% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 10.002688172 180% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.