Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Some people say that the Internet provides people with a lot of valuable information. Others think access to much information creates problems. Which view do you agree with?
Nowadays, human benefit technology extensively. One way to benefit 21st century life is using Internet. Although some people believe that access to Internet provides a lot of information which will create problems, the other ones think that information that Internet provides are valuable. I advocate the latter group at least for three reasons.
The first group are on the conviction that if people could access to lots of information easily they will become lazy and easygoing. In their opinion, the Internet put the answers in front of their user so they won’t try hardly to achieve them. they also believe that access to lots of information can increase the rate of using this information for hacking. Of course the first group may seem right, but I believe that the Internet's information can guide its users, use at education system and save time.
At firstly, the Internet can help its users by guiding them. Internet users could surf webs and fallow their structures to achieve their answers. Nowadays, there are lots of browsers for Internet users that can easily introduce webs related to our questions. These browsers could be the super mothers that can answer any type of questions.
Furthermore, government should benefit Internet in education system. Internet contain a lot of information regarding to science and users even can communicate on line with professional to ask their questions. Moreover, Student can use Internet to update their knowledge up to the universal standard levels.
Finally, using Internet could prevent users to waste time. For instance, searching webs on Internet is so much faster that looking for books in libraries, it reduces going to library time and looking books time.
To sum up, although some people consider the Internet's information as harmful technology, I am on the conviction that the Internet's information guide its users, could use in education system and also could save time. In general, no invention can be harmful if we use it properly.
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Essay evaluation report
The first group are on the conviction
The first group is on the conviction
the Internet put the answers in front of their user so they won’t try hardly to achieve them.
Description: 'them' refers to what? Be sensitive to use pronouns.
faster that looking for books in libraries
faster than looking for books in libraries
Sentence: Internet contain a lot of information regarding to science and users even can communicate on line with professional to ask their questions.
Description: The fragment Internet contain a is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace contain with verb, past tense
flaws:
No. of Words: 326 while No. of Different Words: 161 //need more Different Words
We are expecting:
No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 21 in 30
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 326 350
No. of Characters: 1636 1500
No. of Different Words: 161 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.249 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.018 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.579 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 117 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 95 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 65 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 36 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.111 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.718 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.354 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.608 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.147 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 251, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: They
... won't try hardly to achieve them. they also believe that access to lots of inf...
^^^^
Line 7, column 79, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'contains'.
Suggestion: contains
... Internet in education system. Internet contain a lot of information regarding to scien...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 79, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[8]
Message: The proper name in singular (Internet) must be used with a third-person verb: 'contains'.
Suggestion: contains
... Internet in education system. Internet contain a lot of information regarding to scien...
^^^^^^^
Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'finally', 'first', 'firstly', 'furthermore', 'if', 'look', 'may', 'moreover', 'regarding', 'so', 'at least', 'for instance', 'in general', 'of course', 'to sum up']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.28021978022 0.229887763892 122% => OK
Verbs: 0.162087912088 0.158761421928 102% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0494505494505 0.0866891130778 57% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0384615384615 0.046263068375 83% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0576923076923 0.0685040099705 84% => OK
Prepositions: 0.118131868132 0.118717715034 100% => OK
Participles: 0.032967032967 0.0351676179071 94% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.67494887415 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0384615384615 0.0309702414327 124% => OK
Particles: 0.00274725274725 0.00188951952338 145% => OK
Determiners: 0.0631868131868 0.0887237588012 71% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0494505494505 0.0209618222197 236% => Less modal verbs wanted (like 'must , shall , will , should , would , can , could , may , and might').
WH_determiners: 0.00824175824176 0.0139019557991 59% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2013.0 2387.08602151 84% => OK
No of words: 325.0 408.028673835 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.19384615385 5.86048508987 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24591054749 4.48200974243 95% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.372307692308 0.338922669872 110% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.301538461538 0.251872472559 120% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.224615384615 0.174417080927 129% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.138461538462 0.112833075102 123% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67494887415 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 212.727598566 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.495384615385 0.524397521467 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 50.4614556622 59.2087087015 85% => OK
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6684587814 92% => OK
Sentence length: 17.1052631579 20.5533526081 83% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.7324559345 48.84282405 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.947368421 120.699889404 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.1052631579 20.5533526081 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.894736842105 0.644075263715 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.5376344086 132% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.54480286738 54% => OK
Readability: 47.2591093117 45.7405998639 103% => OK
Elegance: 1.67021276596 1.45489161554 115% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.292538307882 0.300154397459 97% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.112353298347 0.103427244359 109% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0644119538105 0.0752933317313 86% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.548598050347 0.497263757937 110% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.171637583809 0.151897553556 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.101322587198 0.114077575197 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0909598332028 0.0781384742642 116% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.272571618061 0.336927656856 81% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0870254745039 0.067059652881 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.171460347435 0.210909579961 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0805152866254 0.0618886996521 130% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8870967742 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.86379928315 52% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.91756272401 122% => OK
Positive topic words: 10.0 8.42114695341 119% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 2.4623655914 81% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.75985663082 109% => OK
Total topic words: 15.0 13.6433691756 110% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.