Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Television advertising directed toward young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed.
Nowadays, shopping, and business is everything. Life is a big competition everybody wants to make a profit in their sectors. This competition begins with needs of humanity. All the brands to promote their goods, and introduce to their customers they use advertisement. People are affected by the advertisement, and directed to that brand. The problem is brands do not just affect only the adults, since some of them working on children products their advertisement based on children. There is an argument states that television advertising directed toward young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed. I strongly agree with that statement for two reasons, which I will explain on the following essay.
First of all, the reason to be mention is morality. Advertisement, can be sometimes immoral, and not convenient for the children, so that situation can affect them in a bad manner, and change their perceptions. For example, this idea totally belongs to me, but I think it is not good for two to five years old children to see their same ages naked. Their brain is so pure, and not matured. At the beginning they will not perceive it, but it will be so early for them to recognize and try figure out other’s bodies. They can become curious about this topic, and direct the other bodies which can cause in even disturbing people. Thus, in my view, the advertisements should not be directed toward to young children.
Furthermore, the other reason is children are greedy. The advertisers know well how to get the attraction of the customer, but it is easier when your customers are children. Every, colorful, and sparkling products will get their attention. Then, they will push their families to buy those products. If they can not get an acceptance, then they will try harder, to keep their children parents will defeat toward their children, and do what they want. However, this action is like chain reaction, after each acceptance they will become greedy. This is so natural treat for the children, since they do not limit themselves either their parents. Hence, young children based advertisements are actually a trap for the customer, brands are aware of that rarely parents deny their children’s desired.
In nut shell, I believe television advertisements should not be directed towards to young children, because it can change their ethic perception. Additionally, It is totally a strategy for firms to focus on the young children, since they are irrefutable.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 165, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a bad way" with adverb for "bad"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
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Line 3, column 598, Rule ID: BE_CAUSE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'because'?
Suggestion: because
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, so, then, thus, well, for example, i think, first of all, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2085.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 412.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.06067961165 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50530610838 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83815299175 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.507281553398 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 625.5 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 12.0 1.86738351254 643% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.2974208224 48.9658058833 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.4 100.406767564 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.48 20.6045352989 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.92 5.45110844103 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.311696512201 0.236089414692 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0957749858336 0.076458572812 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.128100657843 0.0737576698707 174% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.229923225021 0.150856017488 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0919940356805 0.0645574589148 142% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 11.7677419355 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.77 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.92 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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