Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The extended family (grandparents, cousins, aunts, and uncles) is less important now than it was in the past.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Family is the most important part of a society and plays an important role in individual life. However, a plethora of people contents that extended family plays a vital role in the past but others disagree with the statement. Not surprisingly, the number of controversies over this issue is overwhelmed. Among this controversy, I personally believe that extended family are breaking and less important than the past. I feel this way for several reasons I will expound in the subsequent followings.
To commence with, the decline of an extended family because of the urbanization. People transfer from the village to the city for surviving. As a result, they live farther from the home and spends the most time with their friends. But, in the past society depends on agriculture and people lives near the house and can spend most of the time with the family members like grandparents, cousins, uncles. They also depend on each other and also connected emotionally. But, it is not possible in present days and so extended family is less important for the people. My personal experience is a compelling example of this. When I was a child we lived with grandparents with uncles and aunts and deeply connected with each other. After my grandparents died, my uncles moved to the city and we also moved to another city and sometimes we met once a year. Even we are not so connected like we in the past. Therefore, distance makes an extended family less important.
Furthermore, present days life is so complex and expense also high which is difficult to afford in an extended family. Most of the family in present days are only take care of their children. But, in the past, earning money spent on the whole family because the financial expense was not high. For instance, I heard from my grandparents that when they were young they brought a dress only 2 dollars but not the price is so high that difficult to afford this kind of dress. Moreover, sometimes my father faced difficulty to afford only own's family. Then how he can manage the whole extended family with this salary. Thus, he thinks that taking care of his responsibility is the first option than other members.
To recapitulate, I am on the opinion that the present days extended family is really unimportant than the past because of increasing modern life and difficult to afford the expense.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, moreover, really, so, then, therefore, thus, for instance, i feel, kind of, as a result, on the whole
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1963.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 404.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.85891089109 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48327461151 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68893807146 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.467821782178 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 620.1 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.8927687886 48.9658058833 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.7916666667 100.406767564 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.8333333333 20.6045352989 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.04166666667 5.45110844103 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.234583135358 0.236089414692 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0697061255184 0.076458572812 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0613677755807 0.0737576698707 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.146513137648 0.150856017488 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0566864525844 0.0645574589148 88% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 11.7677419355 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.61 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.56 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 61.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.5 Out of 30
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