Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
There is no doubt that celebrities have tremendous influence on all people in the world. However, some people contend that the opinions of celebrities are more important to young people than they are to older people, while others contend otherwise. Personally, I strongly agree that the opinions of celebrities are more important to younger people.
To begin with, young people's behaviors can be easily influenced by other people, especially by the celebrities. Take the famous YouTuber, Pewdiepie, for example. This YouTuber aims to entertain audience, and he owns more than 50 million subscribes, which mostly come from the teenagers. Being attracted by the funny contents, young people are willing to spend a lot of time watching the videos of made by Pewdiepie, and they even tend to mimic what Pewdiepie says and how Pewdiepie behaves. In one of the Pewdiepie's video, he tries to encourage people to donate to the refugees. After young people watching this video, they germinate the idea that there are unfortunate people in the world and people should help each other. This example shows that celebrities can have a great influence on the teenagers.
In addition, young people do not own a strong mind like the elders do. When encountering adversities, the youngsters often require the others' help and encouragement. The celebrities such as the athletes play the important roles in inspiring the young people. For example, when a basketball team is lagging behind their opponents, the situation is so frustrating and make people want to give up. However, through the perseverance, this team dramatically win the game in the game. This story can inspire young people a lot. The athletes tell the young people that even if they are trapped in a desperate situation, there is always hope left for the people who do not give up.
Admittedly, some people may argue that celebrities could also have great influence on the elderly people. However, unlike the elderly people, young people's mind are not strong and their concepts are not fixed. Celebrities definitely have more influence on the young people, and therefore their opinions are more important to the young people than they do to the older people. The young people are still at the stage of exploring the world, after all.
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 73
- Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to 70
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 136, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'others'' or 'other's'?
Suggestion: others'; other's
...ities, the youngsters often require the others help and encouragement. The celebrities...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, may, so, still, therefore, while, after all, for example, in addition, no doubt, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 43.0788530466 53% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1922.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 376.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.11170212766 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40348946061 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68886003939 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.484042553191 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 593.1 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.2411002086 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.5238095238 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.9047619048 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.80952380952 5.45110844103 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.243581884856 0.236089414692 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0821067208957 0.076458572812 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0758516795348 0.0737576698707 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.174403826243 0.150856017488 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0544902203995 0.0645574589148 84% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.06 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.71 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 86.8835125448 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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