Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.
It goes without saying that in this a sophisticated world where the communication technology growing so fast that it could hardly be believed, famous individual's attitude has played a prominent role in all societies. Some people are inclined toward this opinion that younger take more attention to celebrities' attitude than older ones while others look at this concept through a different lens. From my vantage point, celebrities’ view point influence younger more than older people. In the following paragraphs, I will illustrate the most outstanding reasons.
First and foremost, younger people has less experience than older ones which it leads them to be more vulnerable toward new opinion, especially from famous person. Sometimes, teenagers are not mature enough to choose their own way of living, so, they like to follow their admired people. Besides, they are more inclining to take risk, try new experience and look at a concept through different view point. They are also more tolerate their opposite view point. On the other hand, older people do not tend to change their lifestyle. To illustrate, a noteworthy statistics conducted in our country reveal that more than 87 percent of advertises on TV apply celebrities’ attitude to encourage younger people, the age between 20 to 30 years old, to buy their products. It seems they also know about the impact of celebrities’ opinion toward younger people.
Another subtle point that should be mentioned is that younger people have more time to improve their knowledge of celebrities' opinion. They access a wide variety of information source which expose the private life of renown individual. In this way, they become more familiar with famous person’s opinion and their lifestyle. In contrast, it is hard for older people to devote their time for such an understanding of celebrities’ personality. Take me for example, football is my hobby and I love Zlatan who is now playing for Manchester United. I read his autobiography book, follow his page on Instagram and Facebook. I can recall when I was teenager, I also tried to mimic his hair cut. However, nowadays, due to my busy schedule I cannot spend too much time to pay attention for his latest news. therefore, time is an essential factor to know the personality of celebrities which is followed by more influence on people, I suppose.
In conclusion, well-known individual’s opinion can influence people’s attitude. Younger people are more willing to gain new experience and take risks. Because they have more free time compare to older people, they become more familiar with the personality of famous person. This is my deep belief that the opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'individuals'' or 'individual's'?
Suggestion: individuals'; individual's
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Therefore
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...y more influence on people, I suppose. In conclusion, well-known individual&apo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, first, however, if, look, so, therefore, well, while, for example, i suppose, in conclusion, in contrast, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2384.0 1977.66487455 121% => OK
No of words: 454.0 407.700716846 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.25110132159 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61598047577 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00585829192 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Unique words: 238.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.52422907489 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 752.4 618.680645161 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.8636263527 48.9658058833 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.3333333333 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9166666667 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.125 5.45110844103 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.377397162915 0.236089414692 160% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.112814016084 0.076458572812 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.113428826948 0.0737576698707 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.266195614045 0.150856017488 176% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.121477840112 0.0645574589148 188% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 11.7677419355 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 58.1214874552 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.17 10.9000537634 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.22 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 86.8835125448 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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