Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It is undeniable that figure heads such as famous entertainers and athletes have had influence on the society in terms of the way of living, thinking and even their characteristics. Some individuals claim that the celebrities have more impact on young people comparing with older. I hold a positive view for a couple of reasons described in the following.
To begin with, tanks to technology young people are more active than older in the internet and social networks. Actually, technology provides an efficient method of connection between young and celebrities. For example, the vast majority of celebrities have pages in social networks such as Facebook or Instagram in which pages easily connect with their fans.
Secondly, celebrities are more similar to young people than older people, in terms of the way of living, dressing and etc. Both young and celebrities dress based on fashion mode. In fact, there is a mutual connection between them. For example, the statistics in Iran clearly demonstrate that there is a great tendency between young people to follow the way of dressing celebrates.
Another reason is that the personality of older people is developed completely and create a pattern of living for their life. Controversy, the personality and characteristic of young people are not developed and for personality growth they look for a model. Actually, they imitate the behavior of famous people, since they believe that these models are suitable for them. For example, some young people purchase brand clothes similar well-known people.
Eventually, older people have more concerns such as diseases or the pressures of life than young people. Therefore, they do not have tendency to celebrities to all the time follow the news related to them.
To conclude, for those reasons it seems to me that the figure heads have more influence on youth than older people.
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- TOEFL T P O 40 - Integrated Writing Task 3
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 115, Rule ID: AND_ETC[1]
Message: Use simply 'etc.'.
Suggestion: etc.
...in terms of the way of living, dressing and etc. Both young and celebrities dress based ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, if, look, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, for example, in fact, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 9.8082437276 0% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 43.0788530466 51% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1580.0 1977.66487455 80% => OK
No of words: 304.0 407.700716846 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.19736842105 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17559525986 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76754038424 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 146.0 212.727598566 69% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.480263157895 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 495.9 618.680645161 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.8953462701 48.9658058833 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.9411764706 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8823529412 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.05882352941 5.45110844103 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.53405017921 132% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.225970175964 0.236089414692 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0817167313119 0.076458572812 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0542949034792 0.0737576698707 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.134640932238 0.150856017488 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0321283037236 0.0645574589148 50% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.58 10.9000537634 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.22 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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