Some parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school. Do you think this is a good idea?
There is no doubt that the children’s academic progression is pleasant for families and for this aim families provide children with various encouragements such as paying money for achieving a good score in the school. Some people claims that this method of encouragement is appropriate, while other believe that this method can have dire effects on the education and personal life of children. Although, both views are respectable, it seems that paying money for achieving a good score is inappropriate way which of encouragement, and the reasons of this view will be explain in the following.
To begin with, all the families do not have a strong economic condition which pay money to children for a high grade. In fact, some families have considerable problems to pay the costs of children and they have various problems. Thus, they cannot pay money for a high grade, while other rich families are affordable for this method. As a result, this method would have detrimental effects on middle-class student such as Psychological problems and poor performance in their education career.
Furthermore, by this method a kind of neither has been prevailed between student. In fact, student would learn to tray just for money neither for their personal growth nor help to others. Undoubtedly, in the future they would put effort to achieve materialistic goals and this way of living would have substantial drawbacks on societies. A telling example is the current condition of modern life, while the most developed countries have perfect condition in their live and have huge amount of money, other poor countries have suffered from various problems such as famine, drought or serious diseases.
Admittedly, students need to be encouraged for better education performance to base on this motivator put more energy to become successful, nevertheless, there are various methods to hopefully become a source of inspiration for them such as moderate gifts.
To conclude, for those reasons I completely disagree with monetary motivator for student.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, if, nevertheless, so, thus, while, in fact, kind of, no doubt, such as, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 43.0788530466 53% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1724.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 326.0 407.700716846 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.28834355828 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24917287072 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9298316647 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 212.727598566 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.527607361963 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 526.5 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 60.2743235785 48.9658058833 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.615384615 100.406767564 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0769230769 20.6045352989 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.53846153846 5.45110844103 157% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.243041598794 0.236089414692 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0986955211621 0.076458572812 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0620207851665 0.0737576698707 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.131025044039 0.150856017488 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0729428294679 0.0645574589148 113% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 11.7677419355 136% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.7 10.9000537634 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.46 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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