There is no gainsaying that celebrities have far-reaching impacts on people. In this respect, there are controversial arguments whether opinions of celebrities affect youngsters more or older people. From my perspective, there is no doubt that the great majority of young people attach great important to opinions of celebrities. The ensuing paragraphs will elaborate my points of view.
First exquisite point to be mentioned is that youngsters are naïve. It is undeniable that one of the conspicuous differences between young and older people, is experience. Older people mostly live more time and experience ups and downs of life and they do not trust to other people easily. Moreover, older people’s thought and attitude have been formed during their lives and they cannot change their mind easily. However, young people are at the first stages of their lives and they like to know about anything or even experience new things. These people are concerned about their environment and others. AS a result, they are curious about the opinion of familiar people like parents, grandparents, celebrities etc. Therefore, young people have more enthusiastic about the celebrities’ opinion, consequently celebrities’ opinion have more profound impacts on this people.
Second point that comes to my mind is that young people have more time which causes youngsters to be able to talk about the celebrities’ opinions. For instance, when I was younger, my best friend and I talked for hours about our favorite singer. We talked about his life, music, words, opinions and I recall that once we wanted to vote for presidential election, we voted to the candidate whom was championed with our favorite singer. On the contrary, after working, I do not have much time and I virtually do not care about my favorite singer, even I do not have time for listening to his music. Hence, adult people are more occupied and they have less time than young people to devote for celebrities life and opinion. In result, the older people are less likely to be affected by celebrities’ opinion.
Last but not least, there is no doubt that people are interested to know about their same aged people. They want to know how these people are more successful than them. As a matter of fact, people usually are more affected with older people that young people and most of the celebrities are young which causes their opinions have extensive effect on the youngster rather than adults.
In conclusion, contemplating all aforementioned paragraphs, opinion of celebrities have striking impacts on youngsters, because young people not only are more naive but also have more time. Moreover the most of celebrities and young people are the same aged.
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Suggestion: most of the celebrities; most celebrities
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, hence, however, if, moreover, second, so, therefore, thus, for instance, in conclusion, no doubt, as a matter of fact, as a result, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 15.1003584229 172% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2309.0 1977.66487455 117% => OK
No of words: 444.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.20045045045 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5903493882 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89129105347 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.452702702703 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 727.2 618.680645161 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.2635131375 48.9658058833 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.391304348 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3043478261 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.78260869565 5.45110844103 143% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.20704440328 0.236089414692 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0762225498088 0.076458572812 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0482520510016 0.0737576698707 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.138998510843 0.150856017488 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0368663739897 0.0645574589148 57% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 11.7677419355 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.88 10.9000537634 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.82 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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